for Twelve1/26/2013 c23 Tay
Oh god, it's so adorable! I loved the little twist on one of my favorite stories ever 3 You're the best :D
Oh god, it's so adorable! I loved the little twist on one of my favorite stories ever 3 You're the best :D
2/12/2011 c23 
7Wahya Koda
I really enjoyed this story. You took a fairy tale and made it your own. Good job!
7Wahya KodaI really enjoyed this story. You took a fairy tale and made it your own. Good job!
2/8/2011 c24 4Astarael-11
Hey!
Wow, so I just read your story and thought it was very good. I loved the new twist you put on such an ageless story (and I do have to say that I have a soft spot for fairytales and fables)!
I just thought there were a few things you might like to know.
Firstly, I think you may have accidentally posted chapter 8 twice, you may just want to check that out and it is very easily fixed.
Secondly, I absolutely loved the characters and the events of this story but you may just want to flesh out parts (I know I'm terrible at this and the stories I have posted on fp need to be fixed in that regard but hopefully the story I'm writing now which isn't on here is much better in that respect). This is probably something you might like to think about if you want to rewrite the story, it'll make it longer and the extra details will give it that story meatiness.
Other than that, I thought it was very good and I love how you gave the story so much more depth than the original (not that I didn't love the original, but you know).
Also, I was a bit sad that Michael wasn't in it more but that's also because I have a thing for hot lead male characters (who doesn't :P)
Anyway, I thought it was really good. I hope this comment made sense and I hope you keep writing! :)
4Astarael-11Hey!
Wow, so I just read your story and thought it was very good. I loved the new twist you put on such an ageless story (and I do have to say that I have a soft spot for fairytales and fables)!
I just thought there were a few things you might like to know.
Firstly, I think you may have accidentally posted chapter 8 twice, you may just want to check that out and it is very easily fixed.
Secondly, I absolutely loved the characters and the events of this story but you may just want to flesh out parts (I know I'm terrible at this and the stories I have posted on fp need to be fixed in that regard but hopefully the story I'm writing now which isn't on here is much better in that respect). This is probably something you might like to think about if you want to rewrite the story, it'll make it longer and the extra details will give it that story meatiness.
Other than that, I thought it was very good and I love how you gave the story so much more depth than the original (not that I didn't love the original, but you know).
Also, I was a bit sad that Michael wasn't in it more but that's also because I have a thing for hot lead male characters (who doesn't :P)
Anyway, I thought it was really good. I hope this comment made sense and I hope you keep writing! :)
11/29/2010 c2 1Remake a World
Hey! This is a really good story so far. I'll keep reading as soon as I can. I really like how you fleshed out all the characters. Great job!
1Remake a WorldHey! This is a really good story so far. I'll keep reading as soon as I can. I really like how you fleshed out all the characters. Great job!