for Your Eyes Shine Violet8/29/2010 c1 
16dail-of-the-air
Jagged-glass beautiful. Somewhat incoherent, but in the face of death, who expects rationality? It really adds to the moment.
In paragraph two, "immanent" should be "imminent".
I like your prose somewhat better than your poetry. The language you use is very poetic in that it gets to the point, but your writing appreciates the sound of words and not just their meaning. Great job!
16dail-of-the-airJagged-glass beautiful. Somewhat incoherent, but in the face of death, who expects rationality? It really adds to the moment.
In paragraph two, "immanent" should be "imminent".
I like your prose somewhat better than your poetry. The language you use is very poetic in that it gets to the point, but your writing appreciates the sound of words and not just their meaning. Great job!
8/27/2010 c1 10Koki Enwai
This was really moving for me. It's flawlessly written and much more emotionally charged than I'd expected. Well done.
- Koki
10Koki EnwaiThis was really moving for me. It's flawlessly written and much more emotionally charged than I'd expected. Well done.
- Koki
8/9/2010 c1 353Louis Denair
Quite an interesting experiment. Transforming a romantic encounter to the cosmic scale with all the big-bang(s) involved. Very well written too, and that's what makes it such a pleasure to read.
353Louis DenairQuite an interesting experiment. Transforming a romantic encounter to the cosmic scale with all the big-bang(s) involved. Very well written too, and that's what makes it such a pleasure to read.
8/4/2010 c1 Lanayaj
I don't really understand the romance genre of the story, but I love this piece. It's so dramatic. The language and grammar is awesome, and exceptional. It's so sad; I feel kind of depressed reading it, but it makes me all the more interested.
Lana
I don't really understand the romance genre of the story, but I love this piece. It's so dramatic. The language and grammar is awesome, and exceptional. It's so sad; I feel kind of depressed reading it, but it makes me all the more interested.
Lana