for First Kiss3/14/2014 c1 RayGasan
I don't know you still come back here to check once in a while but I just want you to know that this short story impressed me so much. Mainly because, by the time I write this, I'm 24 and haven't kissed before.
I'm soooooooooooooooooooooo looking forward to know what it's gonna feel like
I don't know you still come back here to check once in a while but I just want you to know that this short story impressed me so much. Mainly because, by the time I write this, I'm 24 and haven't kissed before.
I'm soooooooooooooooooooooo looking forward to know what it's gonna feel like
8/5/2010 c1 
41chewychester
This was cute. I can relate. I met a guy, no, THE guy and I have flutters and my body goes to nerves around him. We haven't had a kiss yet though. so, let this story go on.
41chewychesterThis was cute. I can relate. I met a guy, no, THE guy and I have flutters and my body goes to nerves around him. We haven't had a kiss yet though. so, let this story go on.
8/5/2010 c1 ILikeSpoons
This is super short, but it's cute, I like it. :D
Why is the dialogue italicized? It's a little odd/confusing if it is.
After someone talks the thing after shouldn't be capitalized...here, an example. "No." her sister replied bluntly. The h in her shouldn't be capitalized...you get what I'm trying to say?
Also after a ... the thing after shouldn't be capitalized so like when you wrote, "Wow...Did the earth spin too, like it does in the movies?" Did shouldn't be capitalized. I hope I've helped you, though I'm not that great at explaining.
Keep up the great/cute writing! :D
-YellowBananas
P.S Hopefully you don't hate me for this kind of review/feedback, because I know of some people that do hate for this review/feedback... but I just trying to help. :)
This is super short, but it's cute, I like it. :D
Why is the dialogue italicized? It's a little odd/confusing if it is.
After someone talks the thing after shouldn't be capitalized...here, an example. "No." her sister replied bluntly. The h in her shouldn't be capitalized...you get what I'm trying to say?
Also after a ... the thing after shouldn't be capitalized so like when you wrote, "Wow...Did the earth spin too, like it does in the movies?" Did shouldn't be capitalized. I hope I've helped you, though I'm not that great at explaining.
Keep up the great/cute writing! :D
-YellowBananas
P.S Hopefully you don't hate me for this kind of review/feedback, because I know of some people that do hate for this review/feedback... but I just trying to help. :)