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12/1/2011 c20 jaskolka
Oh, from the very beginning till the epilogue I enjoyed this story so much... I seriously think that it deserves many, many more reviews. Sometimes I can't quite comprehend how some very mediocre fic is simply flooded by comments while a good quality story with real characters and unpredictable ending remains underrated.

If I was to tell what exactly made me enjoy your writing I would have to mention a few factors.

Firstly, your writing style is fluid, the plot progresses in a very natural way and the pacing of action is just right. Even though some "time jumps" were used they did not disturb the flow of the story, what seems to be the case quite often.

Secondly, the characters - I may be a bit biased here since I particularly fancy stories written in a first person POV, what allows me to feel more strongly for the character, but I do think that you did a great job with Jonah. He was very likeable and it was easy to understand how his past experiences changed him as a person and led to the decisions that he took later in his life. I liked the consistency here. On the other hand it was a bit difficult for me to come to terms with how fast he started having feelings for Sander and once more decided to pursue a romantic relationship. It just felt a bit rushed for me.

As for the others - I fancied Ren a lot and therefore was delighted to find what I found in the epilogue. He did make mistakes but his obsessive painful affection for Jonah was just so... (ehehe probably would have called it creepy in real life but a certain dose of fantasy can be quite exciting)... sweet that I just could not abandon the ranks of team Ren.

Finally, even though the story has a HUGE drama potential, it was presented without unnecessary loads of angst and drama queens. I simply hate it when the main character, or any character in the story to be honest, starts acting as an overdramatic, hysterical, self-centred b*tch (for the lack of better word) who can only wallow in self-pity with a subtitled Woe-Is-Me. Honestly, it can spoil a perfectly good plotline. I loved to see the delicate matters being handled in a more adult, mature way here.

All in all, thank you, thank you, thank you for writing and uploading this fun read (I read it all in one go, not very healthy for my eyes, heh). I certainly do not regret the time I spent reading this story.
9/30/2011 c20 furthestcoast
I love this story. I think it's absolutely amazing you were able to write it so well, when English isn't even your first language. Also - if this truly was based off of a true story, I'm jealous your life has been filled with so much adventure.

Good work. =]
8/1/2011 c20 1lovesyoumore
i absolutly love this. please write more stories.!
8/1/2011 c20 xXxStarStrifexXx
That was absolutely gorgeous! I liked the decision he made but that everything also worked out well in the end. The characters were really sweet and interesting - the diary idea was really intriguing :)
7/27/2011 c2 Gaaras Beloved
mark is such an asshole. you dont cheat on someone you love. and you also dont stay best friends with the cheater. diddnt chris know mark is a aheater?
6/14/2011 c20 jayanx
It's nice to see the growth in all of the characters, earlier I would have been dissapointed to see Jonah end up with Ren, but after all they've gone through, and the changes Ren has made, I find it a very fitting end. It's been a long process for both of them, but they both seem to have gained confidence, and even though they aren't in a perfect relationship (not that such a thing exists) they have gotten to the point where they are able to deal with the problems and issues that arise in an adult fashion, and their love and respect for each other shines through. Although I love the idea of smut, I think you were right to leave it out. It wouldn't really fit the ending you wrote, and I wasn't dissapointed in the least. Thank you, this has been a very enjoyable read.
5/28/2011 c20 hexyz
Nice story! I needed something that had more emotional content and this definitely did the trick. For a while, it seemed that you were going to have an ending that was pretty clean cut but you surprised me with his decision in chapter 19. With that said, it is still nice to see that it actually ends happily.
5/28/2011 c11 hexyz
Wow, I think I would have gone crazy if I read this chapter before the story was complete. You torture Jonah so incredibly well. lol
4/25/2011 c20 3whitefear
IT.

I like Micheal best. Tee Hee. And Matteo.

Lovely story. Lovely journey. Lovely ending. Ha ha. It didn't need porn at the end. :3
4/16/2011 c20 Rebecca
Wow awesome story I definitely could have kept reading more! Like the reactions of all jonahs coworkers when they realised he was sleeping with the boss! That would have been funny. I am so glad you didnt just give up when you didnt get a lot of feedback the first time. You definitely need to write more and i am thinkng of creating an account here just so i can sign in and get replies! Lol keep writing!
3/1/2011 c20 Alexa Dagger
I loved this story. Especially sandro, so i was wondering if you might do a side story for him..its okay ifyour not..i just loved his character!
2/22/2011 c20 ricemidget
That was a cute ending =] its been a great run!
2/17/2011 c20 midgetslove4never
I love this! I understand why you didn't have them do it in this last chapter and I agree completely. Don't get me wrong I love reading about it XD! I just think it would've ruined the whole adorable renaissance and made it a bit more empty I guess. I am overjoyed that he ended up with Ren and I loved how that girl Linda was saying stuff like "The girl's are all over him and he can't turn them all down", I snickered at that moment. I really enjoyed your story, it was lovely, funny, and at moments saddening but nevertheless it was a very well written and heart warming story. Excellent job with it! I look forward to reading other stories of yours.

-midgetslove4never
2/16/2011 c20 7Chasing Happiness
I think you ended it at the right place. This story was simply amazing.
2/14/2011 c19 Driftingtide
Aw I started to cry when I read this. But I did love it.
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