for Crestfallen3/13/2011 c1 
17chlodochar.wolf
Bloodthirsty trees. Heh. I usually don't go for the horror genre, but this was pretty good. The ending appealed to me. I tried to read Tower of Dove, but it was too long for me. I'm not in the mood to read things with multiple chapters at the moment. Crestfallen was just the right amount of story that I could get through it. I'm curious, though. Where did you come up with the title?
Also, this is a random side note, but I noticed that you said you're vegetarian. Me too! The worst question is, "Do you eat animal crackers?" Ha. Ha. Funny.
17chlodochar.wolfBloodthirsty trees. Heh. I usually don't go for the horror genre, but this was pretty good. The ending appealed to me. I tried to read Tower of Dove, but it was too long for me. I'm not in the mood to read things with multiple chapters at the moment. Crestfallen was just the right amount of story that I could get through it. I'm curious, though. Where did you come up with the title?
Also, this is a random side note, but I noticed that you said you're vegetarian. Me too! The worst question is, "Do you eat animal crackers?" Ha. Ha. Funny.
2/26/2011 c1 16dail-of-the-air
Wow! Very emotional, really a dream written down. The imagery is amazing, and the redemption at the end makes it satisfying without being overly cheesy/fuzzy. Great job!
FYI: there are a few grammar errors, not very large, and a few word use issues, again, not very large, but you might want to reread and edit. :) Even still, they are very easily overlooked!
16dail-of-the-airWow! Very emotional, really a dream written down. The imagery is amazing, and the redemption at the end makes it satisfying without being overly cheesy/fuzzy. Great job!
FYI: there are a few grammar errors, not very large, and a few word use issues, again, not very large, but you might want to reread and edit. :) Even still, they are very easily overlooked!
2/3/2011 c1 18Open your eyes Chopstick
your best work. i never went around to reading this until i saw the reviews, and i must say, there's no faults. I'm curious who the boy was, but considering this was a dream, and she was in pain, i wouldnt expect her to say his name or something.
Excellent. Cliche things in here, but it WORKED. i love how you're able to do this. :)
It's funny that this was your dream though. I mean, the story is kinda morbid, and the fact that it was a dream...i couldnt help but think this is how YOU felt after getting archie's review. I compared the dates (i know...i was so curious after out convo) and you wrote this 14 days after recieving his review. Maybe the dream didnt come out because of his review, or maybe it did. Either way, I now know harsh reviews from archie= outburst of amazing writing. Like, the boy was archie (haha) saying "it may be harsh, but you have potential!" lol.
Again, good job with this. I'll be adding this to my favorites now. :)
18Open your eyes Chopstickyour best work. i never went around to reading this until i saw the reviews, and i must say, there's no faults. I'm curious who the boy was, but considering this was a dream, and she was in pain, i wouldnt expect her to say his name or something.
Excellent. Cliche things in here, but it WORKED. i love how you're able to do this. :)
It's funny that this was your dream though. I mean, the story is kinda morbid, and the fact that it was a dream...i couldnt help but think this is how YOU felt after getting archie's review. I compared the dates (i know...i was so curious after out convo) and you wrote this 14 days after recieving his review. Maybe the dream didnt come out because of his review, or maybe it did. Either way, I now know harsh reviews from archie= outburst of amazing writing. Like, the boy was archie (haha) saying "it may be harsh, but you have potential!" lol.
Again, good job with this. I'll be adding this to my favorites now. :)
8/25/2010 c1 Raven
you have some pretty morbid dreams, but i was intrigued. on to the next story now. me gusta mucho mi hermana.
you have some pretty morbid dreams, but i was intrigued. on to the next story now. me gusta mucho mi hermana.
8/20/2010 c1 firebird42
Well, all I can think of to say is that this story has left me... Speechless. But in a good way. :) lol, I'm sorry I can't tell you much more then that. But I like what I see here. The writing is good and the story leaves me wondering if there's more to it. :)
Well, all I can think of to say is that this story has left me... Speechless. But in a good way. :) lol, I'm sorry I can't tell you much more then that. But I like what I see here. The writing is good and the story leaves me wondering if there's more to it. :)
8/18/2010 c1 20The 8 Keys of Life
I'll review this and then move on to Comet. :)
So, this was quite amazing. It flowed really well and things were worded perfectly. The whole concept of death and then love/life overcoming it is beautiful. A person felt that they were unimportant, but everyone has a purpose in life. Very beautiful indeed.
You did a really good job on the present tense writing, and the first person perspective worked well. I can never get present tense right, so now I have a really good example to look at. :)
But victoria...your dreams are probably the strangest i've ever heard of. they're even weirder than mine, and that's saying a lot. XD
20The 8 Keys of LifeI'll review this and then move on to Comet. :)
So, this was quite amazing. It flowed really well and things were worded perfectly. The whole concept of death and then love/life overcoming it is beautiful. A person felt that they were unimportant, but everyone has a purpose in life. Very beautiful indeed.
You did a really good job on the present tense writing, and the first person perspective worked well. I can never get present tense right, so now I have a really good example to look at. :)
But victoria...your dreams are probably the strangest i've ever heard of. they're even weirder than mine, and that's saying a lot. XD
8/17/2010 c1 I'm.Running.Out.Of.Ideas
I love this! You did a wonderful job in writing this. It might just be me but I was nearly in tears by the end. And the ending was great. It flowed well, it's beautifully written. Great job! =]
I love this! You did a wonderful job in writing this. It might just be me but I was nearly in tears by the end. And the ending was great. It flowed well, it's beautifully written. Great job! =]
8/16/2010 c1 7Xhoyl
I love it. So full of life and brimming with action. Unlike many people you get right into the thick of things and start where things are actually happening. I can't tell you how often I find good stories that start badly because they riddle people with back story right off the bat. But you have just the right amount of details, none of it unnecessary. Overall, the one word that sums up your story best I think, as cliche as it may be, is compelling. Ultimately it succeeds at making me want to read further, and as thus has accomplished what many cannot. I can find no major gripes or issues with it at all either, which is very rare. This has fantastic potential and I will be keeping up with it personally. I have a story myself if you wouldn't mind reviewing it. It's called Pravos, here's a link.
/s/2721821/1/Pravos
Reading just the first chapter would be fine, if you don't want to continue on after, then I have failed anyway. Thank you.
7XhoylI love it. So full of life and brimming with action. Unlike many people you get right into the thick of things and start where things are actually happening. I can't tell you how often I find good stories that start badly because they riddle people with back story right off the bat. But you have just the right amount of details, none of it unnecessary. Overall, the one word that sums up your story best I think, as cliche as it may be, is compelling. Ultimately it succeeds at making me want to read further, and as thus has accomplished what many cannot. I can find no major gripes or issues with it at all either, which is very rare. This has fantastic potential and I will be keeping up with it personally. I have a story myself if you wouldn't mind reviewing it. It's called Pravos, here's a link.
/s/2721821/1/Pravos
Reading just the first chapter would be fine, if you don't want to continue on after, then I have failed anyway. Thank you.