for Deleted Scenes8/23/2010 c1 Elber of Torou
An interesting innovation to put the punch line first. This is clever, and still intelligible if you only read it top to bottom. I wonder how many people will try to review this story backwards?
An interesting innovation to put the punch line first. This is clever, and still intelligible if you only read it top to bottom. I wonder how many people will try to review this story backwards?
8/19/2010 c1 Alphatau
The dialogue is funny so far and easy to imagine. A few more details about the speakers or setting might improve it even more.
The dialogue is funny so far and easy to imagine. A few more details about the speakers or setting might improve it even more.