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6/16/2011 c1 14letsdotheraindance
I loved how the poem started. It caught my attention prolly because it sounded so casual with the "you know" and the "that girl".

I'm not sure, though, why you used "&" once in the first stanza when you have already spelled out "and" the other times. Is there some meaning behind that? It didn't really peeved me out but I just sort of wondered.

Also, I just wanted to point this part of your poem out. It really stood out for me.

"and smiled sweetly like the rest of them.

caught the eyes of many but took the hearts

of none."

Thank you for the good read! :)
1/12/2011 c1 Melissa
WOA girl! I love it! I used to write A LOT. Kind of gave up after having Riley, this inspires me. Really good.

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