for Art Criticism3/12/2011 c14 
5kazoua
Whenever James's last name is mentioned, I think of Walt Whitman. I just shudder, geh.
It's obvious that James has been using Peter for some, you know, bromantic reasons, but I didn't he knew it. Bummer. Peter is pretty cool, even if he's straight. Actually, his heterosexuality might even make him cooler.
And Turkish is so in. James has let his guard down. Boom.
5kazouaWhenever James's last name is mentioned, I think of Walt Whitman. I just shudder, geh.
It's obvious that James has been using Peter for some, you know, bromantic reasons, but I didn't he knew it. Bummer. Peter is pretty cool, even if he's straight. Actually, his heterosexuality might even make him cooler.
And Turkish is so in. James has let his guard down. Boom.
3/12/2011 c13 kazoua
Doing the Ivy League.
I've only heard that phrase... once or twice in my life. And I couldn't help but crack up. Because, really, I can't take Turkish seriously if he uses sex terms like that.
He is still cute though. But James. I'm thinking I liked him a bit more when he was slightly bitchy and misanthropic towards humanity.
Doing the Ivy League.
I've only heard that phrase... once or twice in my life. And I couldn't help but crack up. Because, really, I can't take Turkish seriously if he uses sex terms like that.
He is still cute though. But James. I'm thinking I liked him a bit more when he was slightly bitchy and misanthropic towards humanity.
3/12/2011 c12 kazoua
This was probably supposed to be hot or something, but I couldn't help but laugh at how silly and cute they were being. It's like, James is so... virginal. And Turkish is so, well, the sweet deflowering dude. And James isn't, well, a stranger to oral, yeah, but it still seems kinda innocent. As if he doesn't really know what he's doing.
This was probably supposed to be hot or something, but I couldn't help but laugh at how silly and cute they were being. It's like, James is so... virginal. And Turkish is so, well, the sweet deflowering dude. And James isn't, well, a stranger to oral, yeah, but it still seems kinda innocent. As if he doesn't really know what he's doing.
3/12/2011 c11 kazoua
Totally not work-safe. Not that I'm at work, but yeah. I keep glancing around me to make sure no one is hovering over my shoulder.
So! Yusef. I kinda like how James calls him by his given name, something that most others don't. Creates a sense of intimacy, or something like that. Or that's how I'm interpreting it. Or it could be some big ol' cheesy move from Turkish to get into James's pants. Yeah. Prolly that.
Totally not work-safe. Not that I'm at work, but yeah. I keep glancing around me to make sure no one is hovering over my shoulder.
So! Yusef. I kinda like how James calls him by his given name, something that most others don't. Creates a sense of intimacy, or something like that. Or that's how I'm interpreting it. Or it could be some big ol' cheesy move from Turkish to get into James's pants. Yeah. Prolly that.
3/12/2011 c10 kazoua
From a purely stuck-up point of view, I think James is a bit too immature to be in a relationship. Twenty three, somewhat exasperated with the world, not so steady family relationships, childishly indecisive. Yeah. But then again, he's also really. Dunno. It seems like (NOT) dating Turkish might do him some good. Let him mature, grow up a bit, actually do something emotionally serious.
From a purely stuck-up point of view, I think James is a bit too immature to be in a relationship. Twenty three, somewhat exasperated with the world, not so steady family relationships, childishly indecisive. Yeah. But then again, he's also really. Dunno. It seems like (NOT) dating Turkish might do him some good. Let him mature, grow up a bit, actually do something emotionally serious.
3/12/2011 c9 kazoua
People reading risque fiction to get off makes me giggle like made, but this is damn hot. Haha. It's funny how James is so easily changing each chapter. Not in personality or anything, but you know what I mean.
People reading risque fiction to get off makes me giggle like made, but this is damn hot. Haha. It's funny how James is so easily changing each chapter. Not in personality or anything, but you know what I mean.
3/12/2011 c8 kazoua
Maybe because I'm slightly... racist. But, when I eat home-cooked meals with people, they always want to educate. And I just nod and smile and think, 'Dude. I like the food. Shut up already and let me eat.'
But yeah. James must be, hmm, getting sorta into Turkish at this point. Considering, well, they're having a very civil dinner. Easy going conversation and all! That too.
Maybe because I'm slightly... racist. But, when I eat home-cooked meals with people, they always want to educate. And I just nod and smile and think, 'Dude. I like the food. Shut up already and let me eat.'
But yeah. James must be, hmm, getting sorta into Turkish at this point. Considering, well, they're having a very civil dinner. Easy going conversation and all! That too.
3/12/2011 c7 kazoua
Hehehehahahahehhehehe. Well. This chapter is a nice turn. James is getting a bit more manic and Turkish is seemingly... normal. But yeah. Nice, nice, nice turn.
Hehehehahahahehhehehe. Well. This chapter is a nice turn. James is getting a bit more manic and Turkish is seemingly... normal. But yeah. Nice, nice, nice turn.
3/12/2011 c6 kazoua
I like how it's a bit... flipped? One moment, James is all snippy and careless. Turkish is strange. They have a one-sided confrontation. And now James is all fuzzy wuzzy with awkwardness and Turkish is acting like a real guy. Hahahaha. It's just making me giggle.
I like how it's a bit... flipped? One moment, James is all snippy and careless. Turkish is strange. They have a one-sided confrontation. And now James is all fuzzy wuzzy with awkwardness and Turkish is acting like a real guy. Hahahaha. It's just making me giggle.
3/12/2011 c5 kazoua
Guah! Turkish, all of the sudden, just became cute! Like, adorable kiddo with a hopeless crush kind of cute!
And way to levy for someone's affection. I understand the whole, mehh, gift giving thing. But, hahaha, desperate move. Real desperate.
Guah! Turkish, all of the sudden, just became cute! Like, adorable kiddo with a hopeless crush kind of cute!
And way to levy for someone's affection. I understand the whole, mehh, gift giving thing. But, hahaha, desperate move. Real desperate.
3/12/2011 c4 kazoua
James is such a little bitch :D But I think I like him anyway. And, well, Turkish is just one step close to pathetic. But I feel for him anyway.
I just like them both, hahah.
James is such a little bitch :D But I think I like him anyway. And, well, Turkish is just one step close to pathetic. But I feel for him anyway.
I just like them both, hahah.
3/12/2011 c3 kazoua
Just a thought that occurred to me now. When James cursed, Turkish probably got all hot and bothered. Hehehehe. But that's just a thought.
And because I have somewhat OCD tendencies, I'm probably going to review every chapter even though I have nothing substantial to say. Yeah.
Just a thought that occurred to me now. When James cursed, Turkish probably got all hot and bothered. Hehehehe. But that's just a thought.
And because I have somewhat OCD tendencies, I'm probably going to review every chapter even though I have nothing substantial to say. Yeah.
3/12/2011 c2 kazoua
Your writing style is very fast-paced. Not in the choppy way, in which it just jumps from line to line, but it's quick. You don't waste your time on empty phrases. Which is good! I like it. It gives your work a bit more feel to it.
Your writing style is very fast-paced. Not in the choppy way, in which it just jumps from line to line, but it's quick. You don't waste your time on empty phrases. Which is good! I like it. It gives your work a bit more feel to it.
3/12/2011 c1 kazoua
Hehehehehe. Hipsters from California are the best. Probably because I -am- Californian and hipsters are what gives us our awesome rep. But SanFran hipsters are another breed entirely, hahaha, all tinted by the liberalness of the great San Francisco, hahaha.
Sorry, haha, SF jokes are just the best.
Hehehehehe. Hipsters from California are the best. Probably because I -am- Californian and hipsters are what gives us our awesome rep. But SanFran hipsters are another breed entirely, hahaha, all tinted by the liberalness of the great San Francisco, hahaha.
Sorry, haha, SF jokes are just the best.
3/7/2011 c1 Will
Great little story. Upsetting if one has dealt with situations like this (and lost) but succinct, funny, and vivid. "Turkish" is a stroke of genius.. lol!
Great little story. Upsetting if one has dealt with situations like this (and lost) but succinct, funny, and vivid. "Turkish" is a stroke of genius.. lol!