for Neurotic and Sociopathic In Space!2/7/2011 c37 Hi
I loved this story so hard core you have no idea. It makes me ridiculously sad that more people haven't read it. It's absolutely brilliant and perfect and asdogiadogisdf. Thank you for writing it.
I loved this story so hard core you have no idea. It makes me ridiculously sad that more people haven't read it. It's absolutely brilliant and perfect and asdogiadogisdf. Thank you for writing it.
2/3/2011 c26 MissingSomeNecessaryBrainCells
I love this story, I really do. But you're a little to addicted to Murphy and his stupid law. Some things do go right you know, without a series of rather unfortunate disasters beforehand...I mean, I'm not even halfway through the chapter, and already space-lady with the mind-fuck powers is up to something. I've decided that if I'm going to continue to enjoy this story, I'm going to have to start reading it in small portions, rather than 26 chapters in the last 24 hours...
I love this story, I really do. But you're a little to addicted to Murphy and his stupid law. Some things do go right you know, without a series of rather unfortunate disasters beforehand...I mean, I'm not even halfway through the chapter, and already space-lady with the mind-fuck powers is up to something. I've decided that if I'm going to continue to enjoy this story, I'm going to have to start reading it in small portions, rather than 26 chapters in the last 24 hours...
1/20/2011 c37 pour bottes
Dear DE,
Please excuse the length, but once I started I couldn't stop the mindless word vomit, uselessly stating the obvious and failing to show my intelligence with deep insight:
Simply awesome humor and dialogue. You have some of the funniest and most creative descriptions. And nice job with some of those smooth transitions between scenes and storylines. Very cute and humorous. I like being able to play in my mind what I read like a movie, and your style flows so well. I wasn't quite satisfied with the ending, though. Felt like the last lines didn't have enough of an impact; they were significant, but the ending feels loosely tied?
You also have a handful of typos in every chapter (and in Real Vampires Don't Sparkle). Breaks the flow sometimes when I have to go back and interpret it. The overall awesomeness overshadows it, but it'd be good to go back and fix them one day.
I love Marl. :) I think I was expecting some MarlxDelilah, or that Delilah was also from Entsat because of her "ah" name (and when the crazy grenade lady cried out "Royal Highness"). I love Sebastian and his crazy voices even more than Marl, though. His emotional delicacy is simply endearing, and it satisfies my need for sexy fluff. I love Riley's nonsensical dialogues. I love Jaleen and Sebastian's jabbering. And then there's Jakob's hard exterior and soft interior (what is that, like an egg? I can't think of the names of those hard candies with soft insides. Chocolate truffle?)
Dear DE,
Please excuse the length, but once I started I couldn't stop the mindless word vomit, uselessly stating the obvious and failing to show my intelligence with deep insight:
Simply awesome humor and dialogue. You have some of the funniest and most creative descriptions. And nice job with some of those smooth transitions between scenes and storylines. Very cute and humorous. I like being able to play in my mind what I read like a movie, and your style flows so well. I wasn't quite satisfied with the ending, though. Felt like the last lines didn't have enough of an impact; they were significant, but the ending feels loosely tied?
You also have a handful of typos in every chapter (and in Real Vampires Don't Sparkle). Breaks the flow sometimes when I have to go back and interpret it. The overall awesomeness overshadows it, but it'd be good to go back and fix them one day.
I love Marl. :) I think I was expecting some MarlxDelilah, or that Delilah was also from Entsat because of her "ah" name (and when the crazy grenade lady cried out "Royal Highness"). I love Sebastian and his crazy voices even more than Marl, though. His emotional delicacy is simply endearing, and it satisfies my need for sexy fluff. I love Riley's nonsensical dialogues. I love Jaleen and Sebastian's jabbering. And then there's Jakob's hard exterior and soft interior (what is that, like an egg? I can't think of the names of those hard candies with soft insides. Chocolate truffle?)
1/8/2011 c9 Dark Lynnette
Interesting adventure. I enjoy the relaxed feel of the writing and dialogue. I also like the long chapters. Also want to add that I think the way Susannah was introduced was appropriate. I'm glad you left that. It was, however, a bit strange that you put an author's note questioning your decision. I say, make a choice and stick with it. You don't need to explain yourself. It's yours.
Interesting adventure. I enjoy the relaxed feel of the writing and dialogue. I also like the long chapters. Also want to add that I think the way Susannah was introduced was appropriate. I'm glad you left that. It was, however, a bit strange that you put an author's note questioning your decision. I say, make a choice and stick with it. You don't need to explain yourself. It's yours.
1/5/2011 c15 
3SaintFable
I laughed so hard in chapter 13, oh god.XD I'm really enjoying this story, it's original and very well thought out. I like how you have built civilizations and people but don't weigh down their existence with overly complex explanations about them. That's something I've noticed about a lot of scifi stories, too much explaining or not nearly enough. Can't wait to finish it.
3SaintFableI laughed so hard in chapter 13, oh god.XD I'm really enjoying this story, it's original and very well thought out. I like how you have built civilizations and people but don't weigh down their existence with overly complex explanations about them. That's something I've noticed about a lot of scifi stories, too much explaining or not nearly enough. Can't wait to finish it.
12/15/2010 c37 2Krowhop
So. I came across your story...a week or two ago? Since then, I have been reading it on my kindle...at home, at work, at the bus station, at the doctors... Basically addicted. Your whit and humor mixed in so well with the story, and I can't wait to read more of your work. Bravo my friend, bravo.
2KrowhopSo. I came across your story...a week or two ago? Since then, I have been reading it on my kindle...at home, at work, at the bus station, at the doctors... Basically addicted. Your whit and humor mixed in so well with the story, and I can't wait to read more of your work. Bravo my friend, bravo.
12/11/2010 c37 olivovova
Freaking awesome! Omg for a minute I really thought you let him die, and I got so saad, poor poor Sebastian ah but it turned out allright, better than alright, awesome! I really like the plot and the characters :) I'm soo gonna miss them, well I think you get what I'm triing to say :D
PS: Never ever before have I read such a long sory with so few reviews, I must have missed it with this one, and I have to say I have never been happier to miss something! :D
Freaking awesome! Omg for a minute I really thought you let him die, and I got so saad, poor poor Sebastian ah but it turned out allright, better than alright, awesome! I really like the plot and the characters :) I'm soo gonna miss them, well I think you get what I'm triing to say :D
PS: Never ever before have I read such a long sory with so few reviews, I must have missed it with this one, and I have to say I have never been happier to miss something! :D
12/5/2010 c1 Stefdj
I... I... I have no words to describe what I'm feeling right now a friend of mine suggested i read this story a while ago, and i started reading it yesterday around two am, spend the whole day reading it, and finished it today. I couldn't put it down, and i think i shall put you in a pedestal and worship you FOREVER after this! I loved your characters, i loved your plots, the humor was hilarious, the development was awesome! Dude! I didn't get bored ONCE while reading this! I just kept looking forward to each chapter! lol I'm lucky its complete, otherwhise i would have gone insane waiting!
Anyways, i just needed to say it, this a gem of a story, and you are an amazing author with a great imagination and a wonderful sense of humor. I look forward to more of your stories.
I... I... I have no words to describe what I'm feeling right now a friend of mine suggested i read this story a while ago, and i started reading it yesterday around two am, spend the whole day reading it, and finished it today. I couldn't put it down, and i think i shall put you in a pedestal and worship you FOREVER after this! I loved your characters, i loved your plots, the humor was hilarious, the development was awesome! Dude! I didn't get bored ONCE while reading this! I just kept looking forward to each chapter! lol I'm lucky its complete, otherwhise i would have gone insane waiting!
Anyways, i just needed to say it, this a gem of a story, and you are an amazing author with a great imagination and a wonderful sense of humor. I look forward to more of your stories.
11/1/2010 c37 methosdeb
I just spent the last few days reading this story .I just couldn't stop .I was on the edge of my seat.I just loved it .Just wanted you to know that.
I just spent the last few days reading this story .I just couldn't stop .I was on the edge of my seat.I just loved it .Just wanted you to know that.
10/19/2010 c37 ras
This made me happy. The more I read of this, the fonder I've grown of your characters and that doesn't usually happen with fics on the internet. (Leah is like a fictional photocopy of my scarecrow-in-prada cousin, just thought I'd mention.) And you gave everyone their own flavor of badass, which kept me hooked because badass always tastes delicious to me.
Thank you for the memorable and entertaining romp through space.
This made me happy. The more I read of this, the fonder I've grown of your characters and that doesn't usually happen with fics on the internet. (Leah is like a fictional photocopy of my scarecrow-in-prada cousin, just thought I'd mention.) And you gave everyone their own flavor of badass, which kept me hooked because badass always tastes delicious to me.
Thank you for the memorable and entertaining romp through space.
10/18/2010 c37 Gwengwel
It's finish! Snif! Snif!
I love them so much it's can't be the end. No, I refuse to belive that! (Put his fingers in his ears. La! la! la!)
As everybody say...How come you don't have more review? (my idea it's because people search by word (slash, gay or worst...yaoi) if you add some or one of them you could have more chance of people finding your story.
The quality of your writing's really impressionnant. You create all kind of world and manage to make them belivable. At first I had the impression that you didn't knew really where you wanted this stroy to go, that it's was more for fun, but after the 4-5 chapters, you seems to knew, to have a direction.
The evolution of Jakob all the long was make smotly, naturally. He change just what was necessary to make it lovelable but not to much so that he became a GarySue. Sebastian's never had a chance and it's was fun reading about all of his inner voices and all of his insecurity. Deliah and Riley make a funny addition, Riley's just a little to 'special' for my liking (before knowing he was 21 years old I gave him 11-12). As for the couple Riley/Suzannah...I give them 2 weeks before trying to kill each others loll.
After writing my short remark on the first chapter I didn't want to bother you and write a comment each time I found something wrong, but I sugest you to reread you story or trying to find a Beta. You don't have a lot of faults (I'm not native in English so I can really comment, I know that I make a lot of them, nah), just the wrong name sometime and some sentance are cut.
The idea of 4 differents plot was interesting, it's gave the impression of a miniseries, that it's was cut in episodes. Not all the plot was resolved at the end and it's more realistic like this. Not fun, but realist loll.
I really pass the pass hours having a lot of fun with your story and I want to thank you for writing that.
Gwengwel
It's finish! Snif! Snif!
I love them so much it's can't be the end. No, I refuse to belive that! (Put his fingers in his ears. La! la! la!)
As everybody say...How come you don't have more review? (my idea it's because people search by word (slash, gay or worst...yaoi) if you add some or one of them you could have more chance of people finding your story.
The quality of your writing's really impressionnant. You create all kind of world and manage to make them belivable. At first I had the impression that you didn't knew really where you wanted this stroy to go, that it's was more for fun, but after the 4-5 chapters, you seems to knew, to have a direction.
The evolution of Jakob all the long was make smotly, naturally. He change just what was necessary to make it lovelable but not to much so that he became a GarySue. Sebastian's never had a chance and it's was fun reading about all of his inner voices and all of his insecurity. Deliah and Riley make a funny addition, Riley's just a little to 'special' for my liking (before knowing he was 21 years old I gave him 11-12). As for the couple Riley/Suzannah...I give them 2 weeks before trying to kill each others loll.
After writing my short remark on the first chapter I didn't want to bother you and write a comment each time I found something wrong, but I sugest you to reread you story or trying to find a Beta. You don't have a lot of faults (I'm not native in English so I can really comment, I know that I make a lot of them, nah), just the wrong name sometime and some sentance are cut.
The idea of 4 differents plot was interesting, it's gave the impression of a miniseries, that it's was cut in episodes. Not all the plot was resolved at the end and it's more realistic like this. Not fun, but realist loll.
I really pass the pass hours having a lot of fun with your story and I want to thank you for writing that.
Gwengwel
10/17/2010 c37 pygmy owl
I'm really surprised that this story doesn't get more reviews. It's one of the most creative and original story I've read in a while. All the characters are very well developed and all the "sci-fi" stuff are very believable. Overall, I just wanted to say great job and I definitely look forward to reading more of your stories!
I'm really surprised that this story doesn't get more reviews. It's one of the most creative and original story I've read in a while. All the characters are very well developed and all the "sci-fi" stuff are very believable. Overall, I just wanted to say great job and I definitely look forward to reading more of your stories!
10/17/2010 c1 Gwengwel
I just start reading your story tonight and I'm going write a bigger comment at the end...
I just found a little something that you might want to change:
It took Jakob a few seconds to realize Susannah was talking to him.
"Yes," he said.
"Oh." Sebastian seemed disappointed by this answer. "I hoped the color might be genetic."
Hmm, Sebastian's not here!
I just start reading your story tonight and I'm going write a bigger comment at the end...
I just found a little something that you might want to change:
It took Jakob a few seconds to realize Susannah was talking to him.
"Yes," he said.
"Oh." Sebastian seemed disappointed by this answer. "I hoped the color might be genetic."
Hmm, Sebastian's not here!
10/14/2010 c37 ketsuki
That was absolutely amazing. I'm surprised this fic doesn't have more reviews! I think this is one of the first original slash fics I've actually genuinely enjoyed and been impressed by. Very nice work :) I liked how subtle some things were, like Jakob's smiling (or lack thereof, lol). Thanks for sharing!
That was absolutely amazing. I'm surprised this fic doesn't have more reviews! I think this is one of the first original slash fics I've actually genuinely enjoyed and been impressed by. Very nice work :) I liked how subtle some things were, like Jakob's smiling (or lack thereof, lol). Thanks for sharing!