for fall12/14/2010 c1 
34the sun softly smiles
okay, your style is starting to grow on me :)
love the ending; it's like this tiny sliver of hope that you're holding on to, even though you really believe that he *did* know. kinda the inverse of the summary for this, actually - you say "I don't expect you to catch me," but I feel like there is still that little piece of your heart that is still hoping that he will. or that, at least, he will pick you back up again.
alright, I will stop pretending like I know jack ish about you now haha :D
- Leila
34the sun softly smilesokay, your style is starting to grow on me :)
love the ending; it's like this tiny sliver of hope that you're holding on to, even though you really believe that he *did* know. kinda the inverse of the summary for this, actually - you say "I don't expect you to catch me," but I feel like there is still that little piece of your heart that is still hoping that he will. or that, at least, he will pick you back up again.
alright, I will stop pretending like I know jack ish about you now haha :D
- Leila
9/23/2010 c1 81BedHead-RedHead
love this! so much angst in a short, quick piece- I can totally relate :) amazing job!
81BedHead-RedHeadlove this! so much angst in a short, quick piece- I can totally relate :) amazing job!
9/8/2010 c1 86heart complex
Everything you write is so captivating and amazing. I'm envious~
Again, amazing job~
86heart complexEverything you write is so captivating and amazing. I'm envious~
Again, amazing job~
9/1/2010 c1 6asdreamsaremade
Wow... haha, I'm sitting here all depressed about something and I read your poem and I'm like, "Wow, that's me..." so GREAT job!
6asdreamsaremadeWow... haha, I'm sitting here all depressed about something and I read your poem and I'm like, "Wow, that's me..." so GREAT job!
8/31/2010 c1 4HighOnBrokenWings
Just amazing. I can always trust you to write such beautiful stuff.
"when the bruises on
my knees bear your
name "
That was something really...I don't know how to describe it. To me, the ending seemed as if he did know, but you wanted for him to pretend that he didn't, to make it hurt less. Just freaking brilliant. Keep up the writing!
4HighOnBrokenWingsJust amazing. I can always trust you to write such beautiful stuff.
"when the bruises on
my knees bear your
name "
That was something really...I don't know how to describe it. To me, the ending seemed as if he did know, but you wanted for him to pretend that he didn't, to make it hurt less. Just freaking brilliant. Keep up the writing!
8/29/2010 c1 4Peanuts Factory
It only takes a second to realize
the hurt someone's feeling.
Before they fall - hopefully he realizes
his need to catch her.
Felt the hurt in the poem -
keep it up =)
4Peanuts FactoryIt only takes a second to realize
the hurt someone's feeling.
Before they fall - hopefully he realizes
his need to catch her.
Felt the hurt in the poem -
keep it up =)
8/29/2010 c1 19SeepingInk-wells
Beautifully written...there's so much feeling in it, and your formatting really adds to that. I love the last bit...It's biting. Says something without having to really say it at all.
19SeepingInk-wellsBeautifully written...there's so much feeling in it, and your formatting really adds to that. I love the last bit...It's biting. Says something without having to really say it at all.
8/29/2010 c1 lymli
I like this, it's kinda new, I mean, people always wait for being caught, instead this is about falling as if nothing, the ending is ironic by the way.
I like this, it's kinda new, I mean, people always wait for being caught, instead this is about falling as if nothing, the ending is ironic by the way.