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9/16/2010 c1 45deefective
I liked the simplicity in this, really. I don't know exactly how but there's this calm, kind of straightforward feeling to this piece and I appreciated that. It wasn't bogged down by mixed emotions or anything too forceful but it felt clear and simple. On the other hand, I think your formatting could have been better. I don't think you should've cut up so many of the sentences like that. It reads awkwardly and it's too jagged for the kind of piece this is. But other than that, nicely done.
8/31/2010 c1 43losing oxygen
another beautiful poem. there's so much meaning behind the words, and I love it. again, there's a real beat to it, a little bit of repetitiveness, but it adds to the poem.

all in all, it's gorgeous.

xoxo,

evanescent me & my dreams
8/30/2010 c1 3Alice-of-the-Forgottens
I like it! You really don't need to be unsure of anything, because your work is so unique, and it reflects you as a person. Just be yourself, because nobody else can be. :)

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