for nice guy at 309/16/2011 c3 
1Miryo
I like where this is headed. It's a pretty cute story.
I happened to notice that you tend to write "your" often when the word should be "you're". It's a common error though, so nothing to fret about.
1MiryoI like where this is headed. It's a pretty cute story.
I happened to notice that you tend to write "your" often when the word should be "you're". It's a common error though, so nothing to fret about.
9/15/2011 c2 8Shadesong
I'm liking this one... keep on going.
If you could fix some conventions errors, I'm sure it would enhance this piece greatly.
But I'm really curious to see where it's heading. Thumbs up. :D
8ShadesongI'm liking this one... keep on going.
If you could fix some conventions errors, I'm sure it would enhance this piece greatly.
But I'm really curious to see where it's heading. Thumbs up. :D
9/14/2011 c1 1Miryo
Please tell me there's more to this story! I know it hasn't been updated in over a year, but you can't just stop there! This feels like just the beginning. There are a few formatting errors, such as the spaces before commas and the way some sentences drop off halway and begin anew on the next line, but aside from that, it's quite good.
Looking forward to more. :)
1MiryoPlease tell me there's more to this story! I know it hasn't been updated in over a year, but you can't just stop there! This feels like just the beginning. There are a few formatting errors, such as the spaces before commas and the way some sentences drop off halway and begin anew on the next line, but aside from that, it's quite good.
Looking forward to more. :)