for Virtual Reality10/11/2011 c27 
4White Alchemist
O_O eh? But what about the prophecy stuff and stuff? I don't know much about yet, but it had something to do with the orbs. I hope Melody's ok! She almost kissed Chase! ♥
4White AlchemistO_O eh? But what about the prophecy stuff and stuff? I don't know much about yet, but it had something to do with the orbs. I hope Melody's ok! She almost kissed Chase! ♥
10/10/2011 c27 30Fate Rose
YOU ARE A TERRIBLE PERSON AND I HATE YOU. GAH!
This chapter... -.- Really, Sam? I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENED TO MELODY.
And as mean as it sounds... I don't care about Lance, Riley, and Chastity.
Plus, now it's TWO cliffhangers. Sort of, anyways. This trio is just stuck waiting outside and we don't know what's up with Mel and Chase and gah. Did I mention that I hate you?
I would hate you less if you would have just put this one chapter later, I think. Then I'd know what happened to Mel and Chase and everything would be all peachy keen.
On the upside, I'd been wondering what had happened to the Taskalator.
But you still aren't forgiven.
So go update.
I might forgive you if you update.
But you should do it now.
Right now.
Because I want a chapter.
WHAT HAPPENED TO THEM? D: I. Must. Know.
Update. Please? I will love you forever!
30Fate RoseYOU ARE A TERRIBLE PERSON AND I HATE YOU. GAH!
This chapter... -.- Really, Sam? I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENED TO MELODY.
And as mean as it sounds... I don't care about Lance, Riley, and Chastity.
Plus, now it's TWO cliffhangers. Sort of, anyways. This trio is just stuck waiting outside and we don't know what's up with Mel and Chase and gah. Did I mention that I hate you?
I would hate you less if you would have just put this one chapter later, I think. Then I'd know what happened to Mel and Chase and everything would be all peachy keen.
On the upside, I'd been wondering what had happened to the Taskalator.
But you still aren't forgiven.
So go update.
I might forgive you if you update.
But you should do it now.
Right now.
Because I want a chapter.
WHAT HAPPENED TO THEM? D: I. Must. Know.
Update. Please? I will love you forever!
10/8/2011 c26 1Laurel Valentine
I LOVE this chapter! Im so glad Melody finally kisses Chase! Can't wait for the next update! ps I also love Checkers!
1Laurel ValentineI LOVE this chapter! Im so glad Melody finally kisses Chase! Can't wait for the next update! ps I also love Checkers!
10/1/2011 c26 pbgurl
SHE REMEMBERS! YES! Glad that they have Seaoh kind of on their side.
She kissed him! Well gently touched his lips but still I'm happy!
Now I'm excited to see what Melody can do now that she is a demon.
-Liz :D
SHE REMEMBERS! YES! Glad that they have Seaoh kind of on their side.
She kissed him! Well gently touched his lips but still I'm happy!
Now I'm excited to see what Melody can do now that she is a demon.
-Liz :D
10/1/2011 c26 30Fate Rose
XD Nice commercial in your A/N there.
This chapter was really good, but it was weird that Melody wasn't...you know, herself. Still really good though. Will she start speaking normally again? The lack of contractions is super odd coming from her. You even did it in the narration, which I thought was pretty cool. Difficult, though, I bet.
Anyways, poor Chase! D: That's terrible. But at least she remembered! Yay! :D Still, poor Chase. I wanna give him a hug. v.v
Well, great chapter. How many left, do you think? Can't wait for the next one. Update soon!
30Fate RoseXD Nice commercial in your A/N there.
This chapter was really good, but it was weird that Melody wasn't...you know, herself. Still really good though. Will she start speaking normally again? The lack of contractions is super odd coming from her. You even did it in the narration, which I thought was pretty cool. Difficult, though, I bet.
Anyways, poor Chase! D: That's terrible. But at least she remembered! Yay! :D Still, poor Chase. I wanna give him a hug. v.v
Well, great chapter. How many left, do you think? Can't wait for the next one. Update soon!
10/1/2011 c26 4White Alchemist
EEEEEEEEEEEEEE! SHE ALMOST KISSED HIM! SHE ALMOST KISSED HIM! ! I hope she's going to do something about that Amarol-ass! :D
4White AlchemistEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! SHE ALMOST KISSED HIM! SHE ALMOST KISSED HIM! ! I hope she's going to do something about that Amarol-ass! :D
10/1/2011 c26 8Fleur du Destin
I hate Amarol. Evil jerk. I kick him! But they kissed! And Melody's back! And every thing is okay! Except for the fact that they're still in the castle... and he's in chains and she's still a demon... But THE POWER OF LOVE WILL SAVE THEM! I'm just going to go ahead and shut up now.
*loves on this chapter... well the last part of it anyway...*
Fleur
8Fleur du DestinI hate Amarol. Evil jerk. I kick him! But they kissed! And Melody's back! And every thing is okay! Except for the fact that they're still in the castle... and he's in chains and she's still a demon... But THE POWER OF LOVE WILL SAVE THEM! I'm just going to go ahead and shut up now.
*loves on this chapter... well the last part of it anyway...*
Fleur
9/30/2011 c25 Fleur du Destin
WHAT NO! D; Need more! *cries* So far, I'm loving it. I'm addicted, but... She can't be a demon! She's not allowed! Well... it's your story so it doesn't matter what I say isn't allowed. Can't wait for more!
Fleur
WHAT NO! D; Need more! *cries* So far, I'm loving it. I'm addicted, but... She can't be a demon! She's not allowed! Well... it's your story so it doesn't matter what I say isn't allowed. Can't wait for more!
Fleur
9/25/2011 c25 pbgurl
WHAT? AHHH! I want to scream! Best chapter ever, minus the dying part. They turned her into a demon? I'm still reeling from shock over that.
This story deserves more reviews. Actually, this story is one of my favorites of all your stories. :)
-Liz :D
WHAT? AHHH! I want to scream! Best chapter ever, minus the dying part. They turned her into a demon? I'm still reeling from shock over that.
This story deserves more reviews. Actually, this story is one of my favorites of all your stories. :)
-Liz :D
9/25/2011 c25 30Fate Rose
Holy bejesus this chapter was so intense. There’s no way I could have reviewed as I went, because there was nowhere for me to pause and jot down a comment. Like, holy shiot. o.o
It was brilliant though. I mean, I hate the fact that it’s a cliffhanger, but this was totally my style of story line. Good gawd, it was so intense!
I can’t believe she has amnesia though! Or that you made her a demon! Just…wow… You need to update soon, because (as I may have mentioned) this chapter was so intense! I need you to update. Like now. Like right now. Please. Because I need to know what’s going to happen, because holy shiot that was one amazing chapter.
Update.
Now.
Right now.
Why are you still reading this review? You should be updating.
Now.
Like, five minutes ago.
Go. Write. Update. Please? :D?
30Fate RoseHoly bejesus this chapter was so intense. There’s no way I could have reviewed as I went, because there was nowhere for me to pause and jot down a comment. Like, holy shiot. o.o
It was brilliant though. I mean, I hate the fact that it’s a cliffhanger, but this was totally my style of story line. Good gawd, it was so intense!
I can’t believe she has amnesia though! Or that you made her a demon! Just…wow… You need to update soon, because (as I may have mentioned) this chapter was so intense! I need you to update. Like now. Like right now. Please. Because I need to know what’s going to happen, because holy shiot that was one amazing chapter.
Update.
Now.
Right now.
Why are you still reading this review? You should be updating.
Now.
Like, five minutes ago.
Go. Write. Update. Please? :D?
9/24/2011 c25 4White Alchemist
NOOOO! She might not remember CHASE~! T_T Though, it's more interesting when I read that he was crying :))
4White AlchemistNOOOO! She might not remember CHASE~! T_T Though, it's more interesting when I read that he was crying :))
9/15/2011 c16 1Amy Stardust
Just some grammar corrections. Hehe.
Riley followed after Chastity, and then Lance, and lastly me. We all formed a train and even though the hallway was large enough for two people to walk side by side, but it would've been a tight squeeze. I sighed as we moved through the hall. There wasn't a single sign of a doorway even in sight. I wondered if these Angels even knew where they were.
There's something wrong with that paragraph. Please correct it. Also, if you say "my brother and friend," it means that you're talking about one person. You should say, "my brother and my friend."
That's all. Sorry. :)
-Amy Stardust
1Amy StardustJust some grammar corrections. Hehe.
Riley followed after Chastity, and then Lance, and lastly me. We all formed a train and even though the hallway was large enough for two people to walk side by side, but it would've been a tight squeeze. I sighed as we moved through the hall. There wasn't a single sign of a doorway even in sight. I wondered if these Angels even knew where they were.
There's something wrong with that paragraph. Please correct it. Also, if you say "my brother and friend," it means that you're talking about one person. You should say, "my brother and my friend."
That's all. Sorry. :)
-Amy Stardust
9/15/2011 c24 30Fate Rose
Reviewing as I go, so I apologize if it’s rambly, random, and just generally strange.
D= Amarol is terrible! Not cool, poor Chase. But awww. He protected her and tried to get revenge. How cute.
107. o.o Holy beejesus. That does not sound like fun.
He’s like… I was about to reference a book you’ve never read. So, change of statement. It’s like Amarol has mind control or something. Like, whoa.
Go, Chase! Go! Attack! Kill that jerkface. (Even though I know he won’t.)
Dammit, I was hoping she would kiss him. Would have been aw-worthy, even if life-threatening.
I saw that coming but ohmygoodgawdLord, do I hate you. AND YOU JUST LEFT IT THERE? UPDATENOWORIDON’TKNOWWHATIAMGOINGTODOOHGAWD. (Can’t read that? Update now or I don’t know what I am going to do oh gawd.) Horrid cliffhanger. Horrible. And totally my style. Why would you do such a terrible thing? YOU ACTUALLY LIKE YOUR CHARACTERS! Dammit, I need you to update. D: How about this? I update, you update? Sound fair? Please? ? Pleeeaaaseee? I WANT A CHAPTER NOA.
30Fate RoseReviewing as I go, so I apologize if it’s rambly, random, and just generally strange.
D= Amarol is terrible! Not cool, poor Chase. But awww. He protected her and tried to get revenge. How cute.
107. o.o Holy beejesus. That does not sound like fun.
He’s like… I was about to reference a book you’ve never read. So, change of statement. It’s like Amarol has mind control or something. Like, whoa.
Go, Chase! Go! Attack! Kill that jerkface. (Even though I know he won’t.)
Dammit, I was hoping she would kiss him. Would have been aw-worthy, even if life-threatening.
I saw that coming but ohmygoodgawdLord, do I hate you. AND YOU JUST LEFT IT THERE? UPDATENOWORIDON’TKNOWWHATIAMGOINGTODOOHGAWD. (Can’t read that? Update now or I don’t know what I am going to do oh gawd.) Horrid cliffhanger. Horrible. And totally my style. Why would you do such a terrible thing? YOU ACTUALLY LIKE YOUR CHARACTERS! Dammit, I need you to update. D: How about this? I update, you update? Sound fair? Please? ? Pleeeaaaseee? I WANT A CHAPTER NOA.
9/11/2011 c24 4White Alchemist
WHAT? SHE"S GOING TO DIE? NO! :'( Aww, Melody and Chase are growing closer and closer together ♥. Though, whatever Amarol is planning to, he must have known the rest of the Prophecy, and what he's going to do next must be theorizing about the Prophecy. Am I right? :D Or just close enough? :D
4White AlchemistWHAT? SHE"S GOING TO DIE? NO! :'( Aww, Melody and Chase are growing closer and closer together ♥. Though, whatever Amarol is planning to, he must have known the rest of the Prophecy, and what he's going to do next must be theorizing about the Prophecy. Am I right? :D Or just close enough? :D