for Nostalgia11/7/2010 c1 
2063M2R
Nicely written. short and to the point. idea is conveyed clearly. Just... Is this supposed to be a poem? Because if it is, then the bracket doesn't fit. We don't usually use brackets (in fact, this is the first poem -if it is- I see using brackets)... It just distorts the flow.
I love the line, 'a media blemish, a man who's now free'.
It just grabs the eye, don't ask me why!
Keep writing! (:
2063M2RNicely written. short and to the point. idea is conveyed clearly. Just... Is this supposed to be a poem? Because if it is, then the bracket doesn't fit. We don't usually use brackets (in fact, this is the first poem -if it is- I see using brackets)... It just distorts the flow.
I love the line, 'a media blemish, a man who's now free'.
It just grabs the eye, don't ask me why!
Keep writing! (:
9/5/2010 c1 Punslinger
Beautiful and inspiring. You are fortunate to have such a mother. I don't know if Mother's Day is observed in England, but it would be a nice gesture if you put this poem in a nice card and gave it to her.
Beautiful and inspiring. You are fortunate to have such a mother. I don't know if Mother's Day is observed in England, but it would be a nice gesture if you put this poem in a nice card and gave it to her.
9/5/2010 c1 51instant bliss
I love the structure of this piece, the way you bring it around full circle - it really makes an impact. I also really like some of the language you use, like "moon-maker" and laughter "rolling out of her body". This is great work.
51instant blissI love the structure of this piece, the way you bring it around full circle - it really makes an impact. I also really like some of the language you use, like "moon-maker" and laughter "rolling out of her body". This is great work.