for To the Wind1/6/2011 c1 
2Elsbeth Lagrange
Very evocative! I agree with Camilleta, I like the repetition.
Ok, call me a nerd or a negative nelly or a...nimrod, but I couldn't let it go. "Whence" means "from where" so you don't need the word "from" in the line.
Sorry about that. I'll be nice and relax my nerdness and just enjoy the nice poem now :P
2Elsbeth LagrangeVery evocative! I agree with Camilleta, I like the repetition.
Ok, call me a nerd or a negative nelly or a...nimrod, but I couldn't let it go. "Whence" means "from where" so you don't need the word "from" in the line.
Sorry about that. I'll be nice and relax my nerdness and just enjoy the nice poem now :P
12/9/2010 c1 SnackySnackSnackSnackSnack
love it. =] but i think you should repeat the last line in the first stanza like you did with the others? maybe.
love it. =] but i think you should repeat the last line in the first stanza like you did with the others? maybe.