for Snapshots3/25/2013 c3 WP
Is the bride supposed to be blind? Sweet.
Is the bride supposed to be blind? Sweet.
7/27/2011 c2 
67moongazer7
an excellent story. I enjoyed it mostly thoughts but very interesting. kept me thinking and wondering.
67moongazer7an excellent story. I enjoyed it mostly thoughts but very interesting. kept me thinking and wondering.
7/27/2011 c1 moongazer7
interesting story first very cute then very exciting. I enjoyed the story quite well. I like the transition from smooth to rough. a very suttle but yet good transition. An interesting and traumatizing day especially for the boy. I wonder why the shot was fired. Good story over all!
interesting story first very cute then very exciting. I enjoyed the story quite well. I like the transition from smooth to rough. a very suttle but yet good transition. An interesting and traumatizing day especially for the boy. I wonder why the shot was fired. Good story over all!
12/24/2010 c3 3Kristina Suko
This is a really sweet piece. :) The only critique I have- in the first paragraph, you use "see" three times in close succession. I don't know if you meant it to be purposeful, but it kind of just felt repetitive.
Other than that, it was beautiful.
3Kristina SukoThis is a really sweet piece. :) The only critique I have- in the first paragraph, you use "see" three times in close succession. I don't know if you meant it to be purposeful, but it kind of just felt repetitive.
Other than that, it was beautiful.
10/2/2010 c2 Kristina Suko
"The constellation of pink stars on his left forearm," - I know what you're going for, but it just sounds to me like he's got pink stars tattooed on his arm.
Otherwise, both these little snapshots are awesome! I love that they're just moments in time. Both made me want to read more, yet they are complete in themselves.
Good work.
"The constellation of pink stars on his left forearm," - I know what you're going for, but it just sounds to me like he's got pink stars tattooed on his arm.
Otherwise, both these little snapshots are awesome! I love that they're just moments in time. Both made me want to read more, yet they are complete in themselves.
Good work.