for Hold My Breath10/22/2010 c1 
145young and the reckless
i love the line "frightens the apples out of any passing strangers' cheeks"
it's so quirky...unique.
overall, this piece is very abstract and fun,
with an almost underlying darkness...
dun dun dun.
well done :)
145young and the recklessi love the line "frightens the apples out of any passing strangers' cheeks"
it's so quirky...unique.
overall, this piece is very abstract and fun,
with an almost underlying darkness...
dun dun dun.
well done :)
10/5/2010 c1 33LightfootLee
Wow, im lost, but its a wierd, good kind of lost. I find myself re reading each line to make sure I understand the meaning, but come up with a different meaning every time. So one the one hand the poem is very clear, but on the other hand its exactly for that reason that I like it. Well that and the clever lines you have here and there. Like for instance "so wide it frightens the apples out of any passing strangers cheeks". Very nice.
33LightfootLeeWow, im lost, but its a wierd, good kind of lost. I find myself re reading each line to make sure I understand the meaning, but come up with a different meaning every time. So one the one hand the poem is very clear, but on the other hand its exactly for that reason that I like it. Well that and the clever lines you have here and there. Like for instance "so wide it frightens the apples out of any passing strangers cheeks". Very nice.