for Discontinued Version of Tainted Blood3/3/2012 c90 Caramel
Aww...Caleb's so sweet...It seems like he's finally being open about his feelings, which is good. Lillie's lucky to have him around.
Kay, down to business. I DON'T WANT RIKU TO DIE! PLEASE DON'T KILL HIM! PLEASE!
And, so Stark really isn't being an ass on purpose? I guess I can... forgive him. Maybe.
Okay,so if Jayce really did crack Lillie, it's going to be bad.
AWW, LILLIE ISN'T REALLY CRACKED, IS SHE? THE MAIN CHARACTER DIED!
Aww...Caleb's so sweet...It seems like he's finally being open about his feelings, which is good. Lillie's lucky to have him around.
Kay, down to business. I DON'T WANT RIKU TO DIE! PLEASE DON'T KILL HIM! PLEASE!
And, so Stark really isn't being an ass on purpose? I guess I can... forgive him. Maybe.
Okay,so if Jayce really did crack Lillie, it's going to be bad.
AWW, LILLIE ISN'T REALLY CRACKED, IS SHE? THE MAIN CHARACTER DIED!
3/3/2012 c89 Shelly
The suspense is killing me! Wait, I just realized something. Lillie has to go back to Hell sometime soon, or her powers are going to swallow her up . . . cool.
And, to Critic101 whatever, READ THE WHOLE DAMN THING BEFORE YOU GO FLAMING AWAY!
The suspense is killing me! Wait, I just realized something. Lillie has to go back to Hell sometime soon, or her powers are going to swallow her up . . . cool.
And, to Critic101 whatever, READ THE WHOLE DAMN THING BEFORE YOU GO FLAMING AWAY!
3/3/2012 c89 Victoria
The critics out there are piled with loads of bullshit. Don't listen to them. You have talent, and that is NEVER going to change. Like, ever.
Anyways, I think Riku is going to do something rash by the looks of it . . . like, IDK, like go to Hell and kill a god or something like that. Please don't let him die! I love him!
The critics out there are piled with loads of bullshit. Don't listen to them. You have talent, and that is NEVER going to change. Like, ever.
Anyways, I think Riku is going to do something rash by the looks of it . . . like, IDK, like go to Hell and kill a god or something like that. Please don't let him die! I love him!
3/3/2012 c89 Daya
What's dark Lillie's true objective? Is she going to destroy the whole town or something? Just when she will be done 'playing'? I get the feeling Jayce needs to step up his game if he's planning on having a serious conversation with the real Lillie.
Don't listen to people who discourage you! Whatever happens, this story is freakin epic! I basically just come here and read all day long. Over and over again. I get to know it better
What's dark Lillie's true objective? Is she going to destroy the whole town or something? Just when she will be done 'playing'? I get the feeling Jayce needs to step up his game if he's planning on having a serious conversation with the real Lillie.
Don't listen to people who discourage you! Whatever happens, this story is freakin epic! I basically just come here and read all day long. Over and over again. I get to know it better
3/3/2012 c8 Critic101
Ok this is pathetic! You've given Lillie no background and you haven't even explained her powers. All in all she sounds like some weakling that can't do a damn thing. And then out of the blue Hell wants her dead? What's the reason? And I'm not even sure whether they want her back or killed. You need help setting up your stories or something!
Ok this is pathetic! You've given Lillie no background and you haven't even explained her powers. All in all she sounds like some weakling that can't do a damn thing. And then out of the blue Hell wants her dead? What's the reason? And I'm not even sure whether they want her back or killed. You need help setting up your stories or something!
3/2/2012 c89 Victoria
I wonder . . . the relationship between Lillie and Loki is kinda confusing. I see Stark as a very annoying little brother, Caleb as an overly violent older brother, and Riku as more of Lillie's best guy friend. I just can't put my finger on Lillie and Loki's relationaship. It seems to me . . . they're somewhat . . . romantically attracted to eachother, they just don't know it.
I wonder . . . the relationship between Lillie and Loki is kinda confusing. I see Stark as a very annoying little brother, Caleb as an overly violent older brother, and Riku as more of Lillie's best guy friend. I just can't put my finger on Lillie and Loki's relationaship. It seems to me . . . they're somewhat . . . romantically attracted to eachother, they just don't know it.
2/29/2012 c88 Victoria
I'm still hating on Stark. But I think it was Stark back then for some reason. But it doesn't make sense. He's supposed to hate her not care for her. Unless there's some weird, tiny part of him that still cares for her... they have been together for hundreds of years, after all.
I'm still hating on Stark. But I think it was Stark back then for some reason. But it doesn't make sense. He's supposed to hate her not care for her. Unless there's some weird, tiny part of him that still cares for her... they have been together for hundreds of years, after all.
2/29/2012 c88 Michelle Shelly
Uhm, I'm still pissed off at stark, but, well, I have to admit, Hanna is really smart. She figured out something Loki and Caleb couldn't.
I want to see what Riku's up to, pleeaaasee! I love him! He's my second fav after Loki!
I want more bonding between jayce and Lillie. And I want a cookie too. But not peanut butter with juice. That's disgusting.
I like Jayce the masochist.
Uhm, I'm still pissed off at stark, but, well, I have to admit, Hanna is really smart. She figured out something Loki and Caleb couldn't.
I want to see what Riku's up to, pleeaaasee! I love him! He's my second fav after Loki!
I want more bonding between jayce and Lillie. And I want a cookie too. But not peanut butter with juice. That's disgusting.
I like Jayce the masochist.
2/27/2012 c87 Mayu
I hate Stark, and I love Loki and Riku. Sorry, but Stark has to go if he's gonna continue to torture poor Lillie. And, Jayce better do something besides ticking dark Lillie off. He's her freaking lost brother, after all! Love her! HUG HER! DO SOMETHING BETTER THAN PISSING HER OFF! Yeah, I'm pretty sure he's pissing her shitless.
Loki and Caleb are bonding . . ? What on Earth? Well, I have a feeling demons have an interesting way of . . . expressing their feelings. :)
I hope there's some sappy moments between Jayce and Lillie for some reason . . . I'm really corny.
I hate Stark, and I love Loki and Riku. Sorry, but Stark has to go if he's gonna continue to torture poor Lillie. And, Jayce better do something besides ticking dark Lillie off. He's her freaking lost brother, after all! Love her! HUG HER! DO SOMETHING BETTER THAN PISSING HER OFF! Yeah, I'm pretty sure he's pissing her shitless.
Loki and Caleb are bonding . . ? What on Earth? Well, I have a feeling demons have an interesting way of . . . expressing their feelings. :)
I hope there's some sappy moments between Jayce and Lillie for some reason . . . I'm really corny.
2/27/2012 c87 sakura Shadows
Hold up, Jayce is a God and a Hellraine? Hoe is that possible! Is he stronger than Lillie? That would really suck . . . for someone to surpass Lill in power . . . I wonder whose gonna win the fight. I hope its dark Lillie for some reason.
Update soon!
Hold up, Jayce is a God and a Hellraine? Hoe is that possible! Is he stronger than Lillie? That would really suck . . . for someone to surpass Lill in power . . . I wonder whose gonna win the fight. I hope its dark Lillie for some reason.
Update soon!
2/27/2012 c87 Victoria
Poor Caleb. His past almost makes up for his attitude.
I hate Stark. What the effin hell happened to the sweet little blonde boy who was Lillie's bffie? Jeez . . . Now he's teaming up with the woman who broke Loki's heart. Just peachy.
DON'T YOU DARE LET STARK HURT LILLIE AGAIN LIKE THAT! IT MAKES ME WANNA RIP MY HAIR OUT WHEN I SEE AN INNOCENT (Not so much) GIRL GET HURT LIKE THAT!
And, Lillie's Dad? What was he like? I'm guessing tough.
Update soon!
Poor Caleb. His past almost makes up for his attitude.
I hate Stark. What the effin hell happened to the sweet little blonde boy who was Lillie's bffie? Jeez . . . Now he's teaming up with the woman who broke Loki's heart. Just peachy.
DON'T YOU DARE LET STARK HURT LILLIE AGAIN LIKE THAT! IT MAKES ME WANNA RIP MY HAIR OUT WHEN I SEE AN INNOCENT (Not so much) GIRL GET HURT LIKE THAT!
And, Lillie's Dad? What was he like? I'm guessing tough.
Update soon!
2/27/2012 c1 
1thedarkaxe
I already like this story even though it is just the first chapter! I hope the other chapters are as good as this one!
1thedarkaxeI already like this story even though it is just the first chapter! I hope the other chapters are as good as this one!
2/26/2012 c86 Lezlie
Hah, I thought Caleb would be smarter than that . . . hahahah!
I love Loki. He's my favorite. Second would have to be Riku. Speaking of Riku, I haven't seen him yet . . . is he still with Marik?
"Like I would know. I haven't sold my soul just to kill a bitch yet." one of my fav lines.
And then, Hanna: "Even though you two are kind of-"
"Even though you two are kind of CUTE!"
Aww. I think you should describe Caleb a bit more . . . I know he has a scar and golden eyes, but what about the hair? I bet its dark, but still . . . I see a better version of Taylor Lautner in my mind. UPDATE ASAP! QUICKLY! RAPIDLY! ALL OF THOSE WORDS THAT MEAN FAST!
Hah, I thought Caleb would be smarter than that . . . hahahah!
I love Loki. He's my favorite. Second would have to be Riku. Speaking of Riku, I haven't seen him yet . . . is he still with Marik?
"Like I would know. I haven't sold my soul just to kill a bitch yet." one of my fav lines.
And then, Hanna: "Even though you two are kind of-"
"Even though you two are kind of CUTE!"
Aww. I think you should describe Caleb a bit more . . . I know he has a scar and golden eyes, but what about the hair? I bet its dark, but still . . . I see a better version of Taylor Lautner in my mind. UPDATE ASAP! QUICKLY! RAPIDLY! ALL OF THOSE WORDS THAT MEAN FAST!
2/25/2012 c86 Victoria
A viper? Hah, Jayce rocks! Is Lillie going to turn back to her old self anytime soon? Because I kinda like where this is going . . .
"Should I know?" Oh, Caleb! Completely and utterly too innocent!
At times like that, Loki's way more mature than the sinister Caleb . . .
Is Hanna going to die anytime soon? I kinda like her switching sides because she has a cruch on Caleb and Loki, but it'll knda be annoying to have another Krystal.
I hope Lillie finds out that Jayce is her brother soon!
A viper? Hah, Jayce rocks! Is Lillie going to turn back to her old self anytime soon? Because I kinda like where this is going . . .
"Should I know?" Oh, Caleb! Completely and utterly too innocent!
At times like that, Loki's way more mature than the sinister Caleb . . .
Is Hanna going to die anytime soon? I kinda like her switching sides because she has a cruch on Caleb and Loki, but it'll knda be annoying to have another Krystal.
I hope Lillie finds out that Jayce is her brother soon!
2/23/2012 c85 Sakura Shadows
Uh, is Jayce Lillie's brother or relative or something? It sounds like he's her brother, and it makes sense if he was a Hellraine and a God because of his powers.
I love Loki, and Rated T is fine. You'll only need to make it Rated M if it has . . . major sexual parts. I don't think it will, though.
Poor Caleb T-T
Actually, I feel more sympathy for Stark! Haha! Lillie's gonna beat the crap outta him!
More Loki spotlights, please! He's my favorite! And it seems like he and Valentia were lovers but Valentia only used him then threw him away. And that's why he would kill for revenge.
Uh, is Jayce Lillie's brother or relative or something? It sounds like he's her brother, and it makes sense if he was a Hellraine and a God because of his powers.
I love Loki, and Rated T is fine. You'll only need to make it Rated M if it has . . . major sexual parts. I don't think it will, though.
Poor Caleb T-T
Actually, I feel more sympathy for Stark! Haha! Lillie's gonna beat the crap outta him!
More Loki spotlights, please! He's my favorite! And it seems like he and Valentia were lovers but Valentia only used him then threw him away. And that's why he would kill for revenge.