for Victim10/10/2010 c1 
97rust phoenix
Very creative and emotional poem! I admire your consistency in the vocabulary you use, it definitely sounds like authentic Elizabethan English. The allusions are also very well done. The imagery and tone to this piece are fantastic, it is an incredibly intense read. One thing that I was not sure about was the word "rapers" - shouldn't it be "rapists"? Although I am not especially familiar with the style of English you write in, so perhaps it is an archaic word which I am just not familiar with.
Keep writing!
97rust phoenixVery creative and emotional poem! I admire your consistency in the vocabulary you use, it definitely sounds like authentic Elizabethan English. The allusions are also very well done. The imagery and tone to this piece are fantastic, it is an incredibly intense read. One thing that I was not sure about was the word "rapers" - shouldn't it be "rapists"? Although I am not especially familiar with the style of English you write in, so perhaps it is an archaic word which I am just not familiar with.
Keep writing!