for To Get To You10/6/2013 c2 muffinking
It started out okay, but I just can't find myself to carry on reading it as it went on. I didn't like the introduction of so many characters in such a short time and it confused me. I wish you could have taken it more slowly and divided the introductions into chapters. I didn't find the main character to be consistent in terms of personality, as well.
It started out okay, but I just can't find myself to carry on reading it as it went on. I didn't like the introduction of so many characters in such a short time and it confused me. I wish you could have taken it more slowly and divided the introductions into chapters. I didn't find the main character to be consistent in terms of personality, as well.
8/18/2013 c16 lindallama
I really hope you decide to at least finish this story, im sure there are heaps of people like me who would love to continue reading your stories! :)
I really hope you decide to at least finish this story, im sure there are heaps of people like me who would love to continue reading your stories! :)
7/27/2013 c16 
2renegade01
Amazing story. I loved reading it and hope you continue with it someday :-)
2renegade01Amazing story. I loved reading it and hope you continue with it someday :-)
7/20/2013 c16 KiwiSD
what other site are you going to be moving to? youre right FP isnt what it used to be I can never find anything good which is why I'm really sad you may not be finishing this on here because I feel like I finally found something good!
what other site are you going to be moving to? youre right FP isnt what it used to be I can never find anything good which is why I'm really sad you may not be finishing this on here because I feel like I finally found something good!
7/17/2013 c1 Critical
I really liked how you started the story, setting the stage with Danielle's childhood experience and how it shaped her outlook on love. But almost immediately after that, everything went downhill for me. Danielle started sounding a little obnoxious with her bragging about her talent but that's not a bad thing in a character, as long as you acknowledge that as a character trait. It seems to me that you tried to set her up as the exact opposite of the stereotyped 'popular girl' (that her sister is) and stumbled into the dark country of Mary Sue-dom. The scene where she flirted with the motorbike guy just seemed to emphasize that she is no different from her 'slut' sister, who displayed a considerable lack of sluttiness in this chapter when compared to Danielle. Not being a girly-girl doesn't mean that you aren't a bitch. While I can say that the sister and her friends display a decent amount of bitchiness Danielle isn't exactly a 'good girl' either. Flawed characters are good, but their flaws must be real and acknowledged :)
I really liked how you started the story, setting the stage with Danielle's childhood experience and how it shaped her outlook on love. But almost immediately after that, everything went downhill for me. Danielle started sounding a little obnoxious with her bragging about her talent but that's not a bad thing in a character, as long as you acknowledge that as a character trait. It seems to me that you tried to set her up as the exact opposite of the stereotyped 'popular girl' (that her sister is) and stumbled into the dark country of Mary Sue-dom. The scene where she flirted with the motorbike guy just seemed to emphasize that she is no different from her 'slut' sister, who displayed a considerable lack of sluttiness in this chapter when compared to Danielle. Not being a girly-girl doesn't mean that you aren't a bitch. While I can say that the sister and her friends display a decent amount of bitchiness Danielle isn't exactly a 'good girl' either. Flawed characters are good, but their flaws must be real and acknowledged :)
7/17/2013 c16 Guest
You should try Wattpad it's much better than fictionpress
You should try Wattpad it's much better than fictionpress
4/1/2013 c15 Guest
I absolutely love this story! Please continue!)
I absolutely love this story! Please continue!)
6/18/2012 c15 HarderToBreathe
PLEASE UPDATE! the sexual tension between Reagan and Danielle is freaking insane! They feel the connection alright. I don't like Archer very much though. Pls pls update very soon! :)
PLEASE UPDATE! the sexual tension between Reagan and Danielle is freaking insane! They feel the connection alright. I don't like Archer very much though. Pls pls update very soon! :)
4/27/2012 c15 15Nikkole15
I hope you continue this. I really like the idea of Danielle and Reagan. They just seem like the perfect match as far as chemistry and sexual tension(gasp! I DID just say that. BAM!) Not that it matters what Reagan does because he ends up cheating while he's with Danielle's sister anyway :) Reagan just seems like the type that has/will fall for Danielle :) I like that prospect! Sorry, I normally am lazy when it comes to reviewing. So I have been following the story for awhile, but I was just lurking. Lol.
15Nikkole15I hope you continue this. I really like the idea of Danielle and Reagan. They just seem like the perfect match as far as chemistry and sexual tension(gasp! I DID just say that. BAM!) Not that it matters what Reagan does because he ends up cheating while he's with Danielle's sister anyway :) Reagan just seems like the type that has/will fall for Danielle :) I like that prospect! Sorry, I normally am lazy when it comes to reviewing. So I have been following the story for awhile, but I was just lurking. Lol.
4/26/2012 c7 1Serenilsima
Love this story :) try to update soon this waiting is kiilliiiiiing meeeee ;)
1SerenilsimaLove this story :) try to update soon this waiting is kiilliiiiiing meeeee ;)
4/18/2012 c15 1HelloFasination
Hey I am in love with your story! You probable won't be updating because I think its an old story but just letting you know your an amazing writter xox
1HelloFasinationHey I am in love with your story! You probable won't be updating because I think its an old story but just letting you know your an amazing writter xox
4/18/2012 c15 HelloFasination
Hey I am in love with your story! You probable won't be updating because I think its an old story but just letting you know your an amazing writter xox
Hey I am in love with your story! You probable won't be updating because I think its an old story but just letting you know your an amazing writter xox
4/11/2012 c15 Pissed off fam
To the reader below me, i dont know what your problem is...this iis a website for writers who just love to write for the heck of it... Theres a thing called constructive criticism amd your comment is so far from it. If you do not have anything good to say about a certain work you can say it nicely or just shut the f*** up!
To the reader below me, i dont know what your problem is...this iis a website for writers who just love to write for the heck of it... Theres a thing called constructive criticism amd your comment is so far from it. If you do not have anything good to say about a certain work you can say it nicely or just shut the f*** up!
4/10/2012 c15 Reader
just when I find this story interesting (not to mention different) this will be the last I will read of this...
This story is the same...the good girl turned bad by sleeping with all the guys..the poo guy who loved her and accepted her...yadah..yadah...so sad and DISAPPOINTING.
just when I find this story interesting (not to mention different) this will be the last I will read of this...
This story is the same...the good girl turned bad by sleeping with all the guys..the poo guy who loved her and accepted her...yadah..yadah...so sad and DISAPPOINTING.