for A Draco's Tale9/29/2011 c1 
16Dragon made me do it
Thought I would choose this one next since, although you were younger when you wrote it, it is about dragons :-) 'Here be Dragons' as they say.
I was taken back to my childhood with the children's fable-like language that you have taken on in this tale :-)
I guessed that the old lady was the dragon, so I enjoyed the twist which differed from my expectations.
After referring to her as the 'little old lady' for the first time, it might be better to simply refer to her as the 'old lady', 'the lady', 'her' or some other variation each time after that.
By the way, not all dragons are evil ;-)
Just a few points on writing style:
It is more common to use 'ordinary' rather than 'usual' in this context. don't ask me why though :P
'to lead me to the wrong direction' - we would normally be written and is 'to lead me in the wrong direction' rather than '...lead me to ...'- again, don't ask why, I don't know.
'so the hunter stayed over dinner, too' - 'stayed for dinner' is more common- and once again, don't ask why ;-)
16Dragon made me do itThought I would choose this one next since, although you were younger when you wrote it, it is about dragons :-) 'Here be Dragons' as they say.
I was taken back to my childhood with the children's fable-like language that you have taken on in this tale :-)
I guessed that the old lady was the dragon, so I enjoyed the twist which differed from my expectations.
After referring to her as the 'little old lady' for the first time, it might be better to simply refer to her as the 'old lady', 'the lady', 'her' or some other variation each time after that.
By the way, not all dragons are evil ;-)
Just a few points on writing style:
It is more common to use 'ordinary' rather than 'usual' in this context. don't ask me why though :P
'to lead me to the wrong direction' - we would normally be written and is 'to lead me in the wrong direction' rather than '...lead me to ...'- again, don't ask why, I don't know.
'so the hunter stayed over dinner, too' - 'stayed for dinner' is more common- and once again, don't ask why ;-)
2/22/2011 c1 31HeroofEnelios
I definitely like this short piece of writing. Seems like a little fairy tale to scare children sort of. Nice work!
31HeroofEneliosI definitely like this short piece of writing. Seems like a little fairy tale to scare children sort of. Nice work!
11/14/2010 c1 25Richard Lynch
I read this a while ago, but I never got a chance to review it. After all the kind reviews you offer me, I guess it's time I make a contribution!
Anyway, when I read the first line, I was a bit skeptical. It's like the old horror starter "It was a dark and stormy night". However, after that, it really became its own. There's something oddly charming about this piece, and I can't quite pinpoint what. Perhaps the casualness of the dialogue, or the matter-of-fact style. Either way, it felt like a true fairy tale, unforced and natural, and I really enjoyed it.
It was strange, surreal (even ethereal at some points), and it had a very specific charisma that really drew me in. Well done!
25Richard LynchI read this a while ago, but I never got a chance to review it. After all the kind reviews you offer me, I guess it's time I make a contribution!
Anyway, when I read the first line, I was a bit skeptical. It's like the old horror starter "It was a dark and stormy night". However, after that, it really became its own. There's something oddly charming about this piece, and I can't quite pinpoint what. Perhaps the casualness of the dialogue, or the matter-of-fact style. Either way, it felt like a true fairy tale, unforced and natural, and I really enjoyed it.
It was strange, surreal (even ethereal at some points), and it had a very specific charisma that really drew me in. Well done!
11/1/2010 c1 3Wechselbalg
That was really entertaining! I love how you wrote it like an actual fairytale - like the good, old ones we know and love.
Really great work! And you gave it a moral too, what else could one want from a fable?
Thank you for this wonderful story!
3WechselbalgThat was really entertaining! I love how you wrote it like an actual fairytale - like the good, old ones we know and love.
Really great work! And you gave it a moral too, what else could one want from a fable?
Thank you for this wonderful story!
10/17/2010 c1 2Elsbeth Lagrange
I enjoyed this story very much! It captures the feel of a fairy tale very well, and it feels like it might work well told aloud. Very nice!
2Elsbeth LagrangeI enjoyed this story very much! It captures the feel of a fairy tale very well, and it feels like it might work well told aloud. Very nice!