10/22/2010 c1 2Bond x Lei
Hello there,

I'm really interested by your take on the seven deadly sins. I happen to be a bit obsessed with the seven deadly sins, so this is quite exciting. Also being a fan of Greek mythology, I'm not sure I like the combination of the two. I'll save my judgment of that for later in the story.

Zeus and Hades seemed a bit out of character to me, compared to the Greek myths. I understand not everyone is a freak like me and they don't try to make them 100% accurate, but it was a little off putting.

I like that you used Pandora as the mother of the seven deadly sins. Her also being the mother of hope was cool too, but how would Zeus or Hades not know she had hidden that eighth child? They are gods after all. They know everything.

Also, not a huge deal, but I feel like your story would benefit from being in past tense, not in present. I feel like there are going to be a lot of time jumps and it's hard to time jump with present tense. Just a suggestion!

Either way though, I can't wait for you to update. This sounds like it's going to be really intriguing. And one quick question: where did you get some of their names? I understand Hubris, Avarice and Ire. But why Zeal for lust, Torpor for sloth, Craven for envy and Revel for gluttony? Those I didn't get.

Keep writing!

J.D.DeShaw