for Penumbrae6/16/2014 c1 Bambi
My heart breaks every time I check to see if you've updated and you haven't. Are you okay? I truly understand that you have a life but also, you have such talent... I really hope that even if you don't finish this here, you publish it. I would buy a million of your books.
My heart breaks every time I check to see if you've updated and you haven't. Are you okay? I truly understand that you have a life but also, you have such talent... I really hope that even if you don't finish this here, you publish it. I would buy a million of your books.
4/23/2014 c54 IReadAndJudge
omg i cannot wait any longer please update soon this story is just amazing i never expected this to happen and they you write just perfect cant wait for the next update
omg i cannot wait any longer please update soon this story is just amazing i never expected this to happen and they you write just perfect cant wait for the next update
4/2/2014 c1 Bambi
Oh my gosh. Where have you gone? I check back everyday and I cry because this is such am amazing story and I'm kind of addicted. I hope you're okay.
Oh my gosh. Where have you gone? I check back everyday and I cry because this is such am amazing story and I'm kind of addicted. I hope you're okay.
1/21/2014 c7 Alyson
I'm thinking that Grace and Eiden are from the Dark Kingdom...and Caelum is trapped inside of Eiden. They're some kind of demons, maybe? The whole Light/Air/Fire Kingdom thing is kind of cliche- I like the idea, but maybe give them different names?
I'm thinking that Grace and Eiden are from the Dark Kingdom...and Caelum is trapped inside of Eiden. They're some kind of demons, maybe? The whole Light/Air/Fire Kingdom thing is kind of cliche- I like the idea, but maybe give them different names?
1/21/2014 c6 Alyson
I'm really loving this story! It's very creative and you write fabulously. Some parts of it are predictable- Jenna and Grace are sisters, Eiden and Lupen are brothers? That makes the most sense. The italic parts are really cool, but they actually give away alot, especially the part last chapter where Grace explained about the God of Sun, Goddess of Moon thing. The parellism between Lupen and Eiden is interesting though. Anyway, great job! The story is very engrossing, and I love the title!
I'm really loving this story! It's very creative and you write fabulously. Some parts of it are predictable- Jenna and Grace are sisters, Eiden and Lupen are brothers? That makes the most sense. The italic parts are really cool, but they actually give away alot, especially the part last chapter where Grace explained about the God of Sun, Goddess of Moon thing. The parellism between Lupen and Eiden is interesting though. Anyway, great job! The story is very engrossing, and I love the title!
1/11/2014 c28 
1Marc Reid
- Nice little detail with the light and coming from the underground.
- I missed the airship! Quickly, to it!
- Can probably drop the "he was right" part, shows for itself with following sentence.
- Sky plants! XDD Uh... manipulate the seeds in the wind or something!
- Feel for Jenna's helpessness when they're getting attack. You definitely weaved a nice feel of chaos with all that.
- That's no mountain... IT'S A SPACE BASE! ...Or a volcano. But an evil volcano!
- I hope Jenna does recover her memory. Or Zeph steals her memory back or something. Also, love Zeph playing the royalty card there. In final leg of things with huge convo, got caught up in all that big time. It flowed pretty easily for me, to point where I forgot to write down more notes. XD Regardless, I'm definitely looking forward to start of this new arc now.
1Marc Reid- Nice little detail with the light and coming from the underground.
- I missed the airship! Quickly, to it!
- Can probably drop the "he was right" part, shows for itself with following sentence.
- Sky plants! XDD Uh... manipulate the seeds in the wind or something!
- Feel for Jenna's helpessness when they're getting attack. You definitely weaved a nice feel of chaos with all that.
- That's no mountain... IT'S A SPACE BASE! ...Or a volcano. But an evil volcano!
- I hope Jenna does recover her memory. Or Zeph steals her memory back or something. Also, love Zeph playing the royalty card there. In final leg of things with huge convo, got caught up in all that big time. It flowed pretty easily for me, to point where I forgot to write down more notes. XD Regardless, I'm definitely looking forward to start of this new arc now.
12/25/2013 c25 Marc Reid
- Might want to use a comma & dash early on with parts. To be precise, it would make part read She, surprisingly, missed her family. Also, I'd probably cut out the dash and use shorter sentence following, going She even missed her mother's constant moaning. Shorter sentences have more power at this part than dashes, or least that's what I think. At where I'd go for a dash, probably when she's talking about the streets or maybe a comma.
- Man this has a nice tragic touch early on with all she's missing and her beginning to forget things! :(
- I just remembered one of my favorite things about your writing! The delivery and way you convey emotions with your style is so grand. Your flow & way to touch things is great and love hit on small details at times, such as her looking at the mirror and thinking that about her image. Plus makes me legit worry for her memories.
- Convo between two, just has nice exchange between the two and feels pretty natural to me. Also, Well played persuasion, Jenna! And love the use of stomach worshiping the food, might not need the italicize at worshiping, it's strong on it's own and short sentence use doesn't really need to draw attention to how well written.
- Laughed at Lucan Polite part.
- Criminal tournament?! Name is a bit on the nose, but regardless, I'm really curious where this is heading! Especially with those 3 in it. Curious if there will be any others featured in this little event or not. Regardless, this is heating up.
- Sentence after "Don't let Caelum die!" might work better for speed if you put "Go away!" Jenna yelled just as loud instead of it broken down into 2 sentences. Makes it less choppy.
- Overcome her?! D: I wonder what exactly she has plan to do here. Take over her body, destroy Jenna's conscious? Well, this should be interesting! I love the way you keep the drama building and building here!
- Might want to use a comma & dash early on with parts. To be precise, it would make part read She, surprisingly, missed her family. Also, I'd probably cut out the dash and use shorter sentence following, going She even missed her mother's constant moaning. Shorter sentences have more power at this part than dashes, or least that's what I think. At where I'd go for a dash, probably when she's talking about the streets or maybe a comma.
- Man this has a nice tragic touch early on with all she's missing and her beginning to forget things! :(
- I just remembered one of my favorite things about your writing! The delivery and way you convey emotions with your style is so grand. Your flow & way to touch things is great and love hit on small details at times, such as her looking at the mirror and thinking that about her image. Plus makes me legit worry for her memories.
- Convo between two, just has nice exchange between the two and feels pretty natural to me. Also, Well played persuasion, Jenna! And love the use of stomach worshiping the food, might not need the italicize at worshiping, it's strong on it's own and short sentence use doesn't really need to draw attention to how well written.
- Laughed at Lucan Polite part.
- Criminal tournament?! Name is a bit on the nose, but regardless, I'm really curious where this is heading! Especially with those 3 in it. Curious if there will be any others featured in this little event or not. Regardless, this is heating up.
- Sentence after "Don't let Caelum die!" might work better for speed if you put "Go away!" Jenna yelled just as loud instead of it broken down into 2 sentences. Makes it less choppy.
- Overcome her?! D: I wonder what exactly she has plan to do here. Take over her body, destroy Jenna's conscious? Well, this should be interesting! I love the way you keep the drama building and building here!
12/16/2013 c54 EternityBliss
Wow. That's all I can say.
I just started reading this, and couldn't stop - wouldn't stop. This was so amazing. Perfect, even.
Keep writing, don't stop! Please? I am going to make an account JUST to follow this story.
c: I hope you update. If not soon, than update before New Years. XD
Wow. That's all I can say.
I just started reading this, and couldn't stop - wouldn't stop. This was so amazing. Perfect, even.
Keep writing, don't stop! Please? I am going to make an account JUST to follow this story.
c: I hope you update. If not soon, than update before New Years. XD
12/16/2013 c54 75AlysonSerenaStone
You need to update this! I enjoyed the last few action packed chapters. I was surprised to read that Eidan raped Jenna-I did not see that one coming at all! I really enjoyed reading about Mana and Zeph; I think you wrote them very well. This story is worth the read and I will be waiting and looking for updates!
75AlysonSerenaStoneYou need to update this! I enjoyed the last few action packed chapters. I was surprised to read that Eidan raped Jenna-I did not see that one coming at all! I really enjoyed reading about Mana and Zeph; I think you wrote them very well. This story is worth the read and I will be waiting and looking for updates!
12/10/2013 c43 AlysonSerenaStone
Lots of action in the past couple of chapters. I do enjoy reading all of the warning that Jenna gets-you write those very well. I also think you did a great job writing Lucan. I can't wait to read the last few chapters. Great work!
Lots of action in the past couple of chapters. I do enjoy reading all of the warning that Jenna gets-you write those very well. I also think you did a great job writing Lucan. I can't wait to read the last few chapters. Great work!
11/30/2013 c24 AlysonSerenaStone
I hope Zeph is okay! He is probably my favourite character in this story! I also feel really bad for Eidan and Jenna-Eidan has no idea why Jenna is being so mean to him! I am still love with your chapter titles-I don't know why they are so amusing to me. I can't wait to read more!
I hope Zeph is okay! He is probably my favourite character in this story! I also feel really bad for Eidan and Jenna-Eidan has no idea why Jenna is being so mean to him! I am still love with your chapter titles-I don't know why they are so amusing to me. I can't wait to read more!
11/24/2013 c13 AlysonSerenaStone
The Zeph and Jenna scene made me laugh so hard. I love how innocent he was whenever he said that she loved bondage I also really enjoy your character titles and subtitles-both are really witty. Great work and I can't wait to read more!
The Zeph and Jenna scene made me laugh so hard. I love how innocent he was whenever he said that she loved bondage I also really enjoy your character titles and subtitles-both are really witty. Great work and I can't wait to read more!
11/17/2013 c1 AlysonSerenaStone
I found this chapter to be very attention grabbing. I think it is a nice start to what you have going here. I also liked the quote at the start of the chapter as well as the definition of penumbrae at the end. Great start!
I found this chapter to be very attention grabbing. I think it is a nice start to what you have going here. I also liked the quote at the start of the chapter as well as the definition of penumbrae at the end. Great start!
10/21/2013 c1 stuckinbed
Hi! Your story has been added over at A Drop Of Romeo, to the Supernatural/Fantasy Category :)
Here's your review:
Click on the link. You may look at the number of chapters (54) and its status (incomplete) and the last time it was updated (4/13/13) and run away, thinking it's not worth your time. You'd be wrong, incredibly wrong. Because, despite everything that goes against it, despite it having numerous characters, and long chapters, it works. And it works incredibly well.
The story almost seems like a cliché in the beginning, with a princess, Jenna and her best friend, Eiden, and an arranged marriage on the horizon. But it's part of its magic. seredemia lets everything seem so done-before, when actually the story is complex, woven across characters and events - both belonging to the and present, so that a beautiful embroidery comes together. It tells a tale that you certainly don't want to miss; that you’d be crazy to miss out on.
Hi! Your story has been added over at A Drop Of Romeo, to the Supernatural/Fantasy Category :)
Here's your review:
Click on the link. You may look at the number of chapters (54) and its status (incomplete) and the last time it was updated (4/13/13) and run away, thinking it's not worth your time. You'd be wrong, incredibly wrong. Because, despite everything that goes against it, despite it having numerous characters, and long chapters, it works. And it works incredibly well.
The story almost seems like a cliché in the beginning, with a princess, Jenna and her best friend, Eiden, and an arranged marriage on the horizon. But it's part of its magic. seredemia lets everything seem so done-before, when actually the story is complex, woven across characters and events - both belonging to the and present, so that a beautiful embroidery comes together. It tells a tale that you certainly don't want to miss; that you’d be crazy to miss out on.
10/1/2013 c54 1Black is Beautiful
I've really enjoyed reading Penumbrae I can't wait to read your next update!
1Black is BeautifulI've really enjoyed reading Penumbrae I can't wait to read your next update!