for The Cirrus Cloud Dreamer1/20/2011 c1 June
Honestly, I don't understand most of your work.
I think a few poems just don't have a point.
This however, was good. The first few lines were perfect.
I also prefer your non rhyming poems to the rhyming ones.
The sky/moon/cloud/stars is usually mentioned in every piece, directly or indirectly. You could try openning your mind to the other areas of descriptions.
You should also try writing song lyrics or a short story! You've mentioned that you like rock, so work on that and go on from there!
Anyway, good luck =]
Honestly, I don't understand most of your work.
I think a few poems just don't have a point.
This however, was good. The first few lines were perfect.
I also prefer your non rhyming poems to the rhyming ones.
The sky/moon/cloud/stars is usually mentioned in every piece, directly or indirectly. You could try openning your mind to the other areas of descriptions.
You should also try writing song lyrics or a short story! You've mentioned that you like rock, so work on that and go on from there!
Anyway, good luck =]
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