for a collection of poems
811/7/2010 c2 white rainbow
This began well but it is too abrupt at the end. I think the exclamation mark doesn't fit well. I admire your choice of words though, and the simplicity of it, it builds up the piece quite nicely.
This began well but it is too abrupt at the end. I think the exclamation mark doesn't fit well. I admire your choice of words though, and the simplicity of it, it builds up the piece quite nicely.