for Silence11/20/2010 c3 kfjhbvasiuhvauvba
I want her to tell someone. This is driving me bananas!
I LOVE THAT QUOTE TOO! I loved Cassie and Effy the most :D
I want her to tell someone. This is driving me bananas!
I LOVE THAT QUOTE TOO! I loved Cassie and Effy the most :D
11/20/2010 c2 
8castiel89
Oh. So intrique! Must update asap! I wanna see Vince realize (anyone really) and get her the help she needs to move past it!
8castiel89Oh. So intrique! Must update asap! I wanna see Vince realize (anyone really) and get her the help she needs to move past it!
11/18/2010 c2 kfjhbvasiuhvauvba
WHAT? That's cold; his best friend's girlfriend? Actually, that's not good thing to do to anyone...what a...punk!
WHAT? That's cold; his best friend's girlfriend? Actually, that's not good thing to do to anyone...what a...punk!
11/18/2010 c2 9Noir Schist
Good chapter, although the first paragraph was a little problematic. I felt that there were too many commas and the sentence structures weren't varied very much, so it wasn't a very impressive start (unlike the first chapter).
Also, as another reviewer has pointed out, the last sentence wasn't really necessary.
Otherwise, it was good. The story was still intriguing and makes you want to know more. The tone of disgust in the writing helped make the character's feelings better expressed as well.
Hope my comments helped, and am waiting for the next chapter. I think you're doing well in writing about such a serious subject.
9Noir SchistGood chapter, although the first paragraph was a little problematic. I felt that there were too many commas and the sentence structures weren't varied very much, so it wasn't a very impressive start (unlike the first chapter).
Also, as another reviewer has pointed out, the last sentence wasn't really necessary.
Otherwise, it was good. The story was still intriguing and makes you want to know more. The tone of disgust in the writing helped make the character's feelings better expressed as well.
Hope my comments helped, and am waiting for the next chapter. I think you're doing well in writing about such a serious subject.
11/18/2010 c2 asdfsadfasdf
Nice job on this chapter. I like how intense it seems and how you described Blake's eyes.
-"He's also the boy who raped her."
I really don't think you need that line. It's already pretty obvious Blake was the one who did it. You don't need to say something outright that you just spent an entire chapter hinting at.
Other than that, great. So far, I think you're handling this subject very well.
Nice job on this chapter. I like how intense it seems and how you described Blake's eyes.
-"He's also the boy who raped her."
I really don't think you need that line. It's already pretty obvious Blake was the one who did it. You don't need to say something outright that you just spent an entire chapter hinting at.
Other than that, great. So far, I think you're handling this subject very well.
11/17/2010 c1 kfjhbvasiuhvauvba
I liked the movie 'Speak', but I liked the book more.
I can't wait for this AND the other one-shots.
I liked the movie 'Speak', but I liked the book more.
I can't wait for this AND the other one-shots.
11/17/2010 c1 Noir Schist
It's certainly very intriguing. I loved the description about 'deafening silence'. Looking out for more chapters. Also, Speak is a good movie indeed.
It's certainly very intriguing. I loved the description about 'deafening silence'. Looking out for more chapters. Also, Speak is a good movie indeed.