for Viktor and Sally1/11/2011 c1 
99Dreamers-Requiem
A really funny short story - I enjoyed reading this, the dialogue is great, and serves well to add to the humour. Although there isn't much description, I could easily picture what was going on and, to be honest, the fact that it's dialogue heavy really works for this. The only thing I really noticed as an error was -
[hereon known as Sally] - did you heroine? or here on in? It could be a little clearer.
Other than that, great stuff! I LOVED Viktor, and I loved Sally's complete obliviousness to it all.
99Dreamers-RequiemA really funny short story - I enjoyed reading this, the dialogue is great, and serves well to add to the humour. Although there isn't much description, I could easily picture what was going on and, to be honest, the fact that it's dialogue heavy really works for this. The only thing I really noticed as an error was -
[hereon known as Sally] - did you heroine? or here on in? It could be a little clearer.
Other than that, great stuff! I LOVED Viktor, and I loved Sally's complete obliviousness to it all.