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1/19/2011 c1 6Raelina
I really like your story. The plot seems very interesting, as you were able to incorporate various flashbacks. Only things I'd have to say is a few grammatical errors here and there, and that maybe you need to work on the transitions between what's happening in the present and when you go into a flashback. I did get a bit confused at first and had to go back and read it again. But keep writing! You should add another chapter to this. It definitely has potential! :D
11/24/2010 c1 Nikki
*squeal* I still love this story as much as I did when you first showed me it!

Gotta love a bit of Rachel/Blair ae? ;P *hint hint wink*

There were a few wee grammer mistakes I missed (it's all my fault blame me! Mostly in the dialogue, but I think I just missed it cos of the word processor you have - it hides them kina :/) but apart fi that its good!

I soo think you should add another chapter :) xx

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