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12/2/2010 c1 lymli
I the message in this.
11/28/2010 c1 LDS.writer.mom
Christ paid the price for those who repent. Without repentance, the Atonement is meaningless. We have to do our part. It's an ongoing, daily process, not a one-time thing. Don't give up hope and don't give up trying. As long as there's a tomorrow, there's hope.
11/27/2010 c1 12lianoid
I found the rhymes in this piece to be rather simple, but it provided a structure that created a good rhythm that was nice, so I liked that. I don’t necessarily agree with the sentiment, but that’s all right, this is still a lovely piece. I don’t like the formatting, though. I would have preferred it to be broken up into stanzas in order to really solidify that structure and give it a bit more flow. Other than that, though, a pretty good piece. Keep writing.

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11/27/2010 c1 287Archia
I like the message of this and the rhyme. I also liked how it had a postive ending to it.

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