2/2/2011 c1 3Jenny.Humphrey
Love it...I have a thing for badboys with a sweet personality so Chase is basically my dream guy!
Love it...I have a thing for badboys with a sweet personality so Chase is basically my dream guy!
2/2/2011 c5 Ilovepunks
Aw, this chapter was well good! Wish it'd be longer but oh well, beggars can't be choosers;)
I loved the bit where you put, "special thanks to ilovepunks, for nagging me to update every possible second or else you wouldn't be reading this now! Love ya-.-
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Aw, this chapter was well good! Wish it'd be longer but oh well, beggars can't be choosers;)
I loved the bit where you put, "special thanks to ilovepunks, for nagging me to update every possible second or else you wouldn't be reading this now! Love ya-.-
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12/29/2010 c4 1Kisara-chan
PERFECT! No constructive criticism, This chapter was EXACTLY what I needed after a crap day. Thanks for making me smile. Ahem... Sorry. Anyway, moving on. I loved how Chase really stuck to character, and you were able to... really embellish his bad boy personality. I loved how Carmen didn't get over her parents skipping out at Christmas, the way how some other writers would make their characters seem. Let's face it, the odds of someone getting over that are next to impossible. Nothing to fix, today, but have a happy new year, and thank you again!
PERFECT! No constructive criticism, This chapter was EXACTLY what I needed after a crap day. Thanks for making me smile. Ahem... Sorry. Anyway, moving on. I loved how Chase really stuck to character, and you were able to... really embellish his bad boy personality. I loved how Carmen didn't get over her parents skipping out at Christmas, the way how some other writers would make their characters seem. Let's face it, the odds of someone getting over that are next to impossible. Nothing to fix, today, but have a happy new year, and thank you again!
12/27/2010 c4 Ilovepunks cbb logging in
Aww! this was such a good chapter! Ek, chase sounds hawt! ;)
Aw bless carmen; such a cutie! Although I'm shocked to have seen her rebellious side today, eating that pie before her main! Tut tut! Naughty, naughty! ;')
This chapter was way way way cute!
LOVE IT! Even more than I love punks! Get it haha-.-
Lolzy wolzy. um,don't care if you fail your exams. As long as you update pronto!;)
Ps: you little liar. You said that if I ate your roast potato then you'd dedicate this chapter to me! Silly silly
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-ilovepunks x
Aww! this was such a good chapter! Ek, chase sounds hawt! ;)
Aw bless carmen; such a cutie! Although I'm shocked to have seen her rebellious side today, eating that pie before her main! Tut tut! Naughty, naughty! ;')
This chapter was way way way cute!
LOVE IT! Even more than I love punks! Get it haha-.-
Lolzy wolzy. um,don't care if you fail your exams. As long as you update pronto!;)
Ps: you little liar. You said that if I ate your roast potato then you'd dedicate this chapter to me! Silly silly
Update!
-ilovepunks x
12/27/2010 c4 6Curlysquirt95
This was another really good chapter. I felt bad that Carmen didn't have family around for Christmas. :( But atleast Chase was with her. :) Update!
This was another really good chapter. I felt bad that Carmen didn't have family around for Christmas. :( But atleast Chase was with her. :) Update!
12/14/2010 c3 booknerd623
I think this story is really going somewhere, and to be honest, I'm dying to read the next chapter! Write more!
I think this story is really going somewhere, and to be honest, I'm dying to read the next chapter! Write more!
12/7/2010 c3 1Kisara-chan
I LOVE this new chapter! It's absolutely adorable! Carmen and Chase are adorable!
Just a bit of constructive criticism:
1.) It'd be nice to see a bit more of what both Chase and Carmen are thinking of their situation. It's not a secret that he's almost ten years older than her, but that seems to be what could be the main conflict in their relationship in the future, and it'd be great to know how they both feel about that.
2.) There was less of Chase in this chapter, so, obviously, he didn't OOZE "bad boy" as he normally could have, but (as a fellow writer), in future chapters, to avoid him seeming like he's falling out of character, you could always emphasize his objective as a character by adding more description to the little things he does, his movements, or even the way he looks.
I really hope those helped. And I hope you don't think I'm being too harsh or over-stepping my boundaries. :) I'm loving Carmen. Hope you update, soon.
I LOVE this new chapter! It's absolutely adorable! Carmen and Chase are adorable!
Just a bit of constructive criticism:
1.) It'd be nice to see a bit more of what both Chase and Carmen are thinking of their situation. It's not a secret that he's almost ten years older than her, but that seems to be what could be the main conflict in their relationship in the future, and it'd be great to know how they both feel about that.
2.) There was less of Chase in this chapter, so, obviously, he didn't OOZE "bad boy" as he normally could have, but (as a fellow writer), in future chapters, to avoid him seeming like he's falling out of character, you could always emphasize his objective as a character by adding more description to the little things he does, his movements, or even the way he looks.
I really hope those helped. And I hope you don't think I'm being too harsh or over-stepping my boundaries. :) I'm loving Carmen. Hope you update, soon.
12/5/2010 c3 Nadinerdrgz
I like you story its very good I was wondering if you can check out my first story i did let me know what you think
I like you story its very good I was wondering if you can check out my first story i did let me know what you think
12/5/2010 c3 classicallyclassic
Keep up the good work! I'm really liking where it's going!
Keep up the good work! I'm really liking where it's going!
12/5/2010 c3 6Curlysquirt95
This is really good so far. Chase still kinda... scares me. I'm not sure if Carmen should trust him or not. Update soon! :)
This is really good so far. Chase still kinda... scares me. I'm not sure if Carmen should trust him or not. Update soon! :)