for No Longer One Step Behind3/6/2011 c1 
99Dreamers-Requiem
Nice short, it was really sweet. However, you do change tense at some points from third to first. The other thing is, and this may be just a personal thing, I think everything happens a little too quickly - things come across as a bit too shallow, like she changes clothes and suddenly she's got more friends and Liam realises he likes her? I don't know, maybe make it a bit more subtle, or something? Just a suggestion. Anyway, like I said, it was sweet, especially the ending. Nice work.
99Dreamers-RequiemNice short, it was really sweet. However, you do change tense at some points from third to first. The other thing is, and this may be just a personal thing, I think everything happens a little too quickly - things come across as a bit too shallow, like she changes clothes and suddenly she's got more friends and Liam realises he likes her? I don't know, maybe make it a bit more subtle, or something? Just a suggestion. Anyway, like I said, it was sweet, especially the ending. Nice work.
12/4/2010 c1 5effervial
N'aww. Sho cute. :) There was one thing I didn't like about this story and that is the ease in which Sophie accepted Liam back. I'd much rather if you made it into a few chapters and have Liam really taste dirt. He did, after all, 'cheat' on Sophie. :( Other than that, I really enjoyed it and your writing has a good flow.
5effervialN'aww. Sho cute. :) There was one thing I didn't like about this story and that is the ease in which Sophie accepted Liam back. I'd much rather if you made it into a few chapters and have Liam really taste dirt. He did, after all, 'cheat' on Sophie. :( Other than that, I really enjoyed it and your writing has a good flow.