for In His Arms2/24/2014 c13 hitokori midnight
How about you chain and gag mark and have Jason kill. There basterd then.
How about you chain and gag mark and have Jason kill. There basterd then.
9/29/2011 c13 HERsheKISSxoxo
you should have them start the plan now, and do a second P.O.V. of Mark and how hes trying to track angela down...maybe have some werewolf scouts find Marks tracks somewhere along the way..etc..hope i helped and if you need anymore just PM me :)
you should have them start the plan now, and do a second P.O.V. of Mark and how hes trying to track angela down...maybe have some werewolf scouts find Marks tracks somewhere along the way..etc..hope i helped and if you need anymore just PM me :)
4/25/2011 c13 The Owlett Librarian
oh dear, i completly see where you're coming from. You could say that i have the same problem. I'd love to help you, but it's difficult to fill in the blanks when you don't know where it's heading to.so, perhaps if you'd pm me with the large lines of the plot, I'b be of more assistance.. i promise i won't spoil for anyone or stop reading since i'd know the ending :p
oh dear, i completly see where you're coming from. You could say that i have the same problem. I'd love to help you, but it's difficult to fill in the blanks when you don't know where it's heading to.so, perhaps if you'd pm me with the large lines of the plot, I'b be of more assistance.. i promise i won't spoil for anyone or stop reading since i'd know the ending :p
4/21/2011 c13 lightXdarkness
Okay so assuming the end is happy, here are a few things to make the story creative. You can have the pack train hard enough during the days that they will begin the war with Mark. You can also try to make Jason and Angel closer then ever. Try getting Angel's scent all over the place by leaving blood as if she cut herself by accident or even pieces of hair. Or how about a fabric she had worn once. But maybe you can fake a death when fighting Mark. Since Angel is the main character and it's all through her eyes then write about how worry she is or make her do something crazy to save her mate like meeting up with Mark. Write about how she feels about everything happening.
That's what I have so far but yeah... Anyways, the story is awesome so far and it's getting very interesting. Keep up the good work so far. XD Can't wait for your update. :D
Okay so assuming the end is happy, here are a few things to make the story creative. You can have the pack train hard enough during the days that they will begin the war with Mark. You can also try to make Jason and Angel closer then ever. Try getting Angel's scent all over the place by leaving blood as if she cut herself by accident or even pieces of hair. Or how about a fabric she had worn once. But maybe you can fake a death when fighting Mark. Since Angel is the main character and it's all through her eyes then write about how worry she is or make her do something crazy to save her mate like meeting up with Mark. Write about how she feels about everything happening.
That's what I have so far but yeah... Anyways, the story is awesome so far and it's getting very interesting. Keep up the good work so far. XD Can't wait for your update. :D
2/24/2011 c13 Krista
Well since you have the end planned out why dont you just write about what the pack and Angela do for that one week or two before the attack? I mean i know that sounds really boring but your a good writer so im sure you can think of something for them to do:)Its better than just stopping and letting the story go to waste. You can write about Jason and Angela spending more time together and becoming closer as mates.
(i know this is a dumb idea but im not really good at thinking up ideas)
Well since you have the end planned out why dont you just write about what the pack and Angela do for that one week or two before the attack? I mean i know that sounds really boring but your a good writer so im sure you can think of something for them to do:)Its better than just stopping and letting the story go to waste. You can write about Jason and Angela spending more time together and becoming closer as mates.
(i know this is a dumb idea but im not really good at thinking up ideas)
1/26/2011 c13 Tanya
col story. Keep writing. You have a good talent. Well here is an idea. they go on their with the plan to kill the guy however. angel decides to plans in your own hands. But things go haywire. Option 1 - the bad guys have reinforcements and angela tries and save them. Option 2- mark does not show up and has his final plans to get angela... Angela gets into a mes and tries to escape. fails or does not? Well this is what I have. Good luck with the story. And whatever the ending is. You are one of my favorite writers. Tata
col story. Keep writing. You have a good talent. Well here is an idea. they go on their with the plan to kill the guy however. angel decides to plans in your own hands. But things go haywire. Option 1 - the bad guys have reinforcements and angela tries and save them. Option 2- mark does not show up and has his final plans to get angela... Angela gets into a mes and tries to escape. fails or does not? Well this is what I have. Good luck with the story. And whatever the ending is. You are one of my favorite writers. Tata
1/26/2011 c13 SejiADettswic
So you want them to kill macho bad guy right? Well, have the next chapters be about:
1) them setting up the trap for bad werewolf (sry I 4got his name)
2) have angel/jason worrying over everything & everyone saying buy before they leave
3) in someone's point of view who's at the fight thing
and/or have macho bad guy come to the house and kidnap angel while she's left there unprotected.
I don't know, i guess it's as good an idea as any. But remember to put in some kind of epic battle scene w/jason and bad guy, k?
Hope you enjoyed my advice. Also, I would enjoy it if you gave me some feedback on my stories as well. THX! :)
So you want them to kill macho bad guy right? Well, have the next chapters be about:
1) them setting up the trap for bad werewolf (sry I 4got his name)
2) have angel/jason worrying over everything & everyone saying buy before they leave
3) in someone's point of view who's at the fight thing
and/or have macho bad guy come to the house and kidnap angel while she's left there unprotected.
I don't know, i guess it's as good an idea as any. But remember to put in some kind of epic battle scene w/jason and bad guy, k?
Hope you enjoyed my advice. Also, I would enjoy it if you gave me some feedback on my stories as well. THX! :)
1/24/2011 c13 FoFannie
I wish that I could be of some help to you... But alas I am not creative at all when it comes to writing. Good luck to you... I hope that you bang it out soon. Also great chapter. I feel like a show down is about to happen and I'm kinda excited and nervous all at the same time. Can't wait for the next update.
I wish that I could be of some help to you... But alas I am not creative at all when it comes to writing. Good luck to you... I hope that you bang it out soon. Also great chapter. I feel like a show down is about to happen and I'm kinda excited and nervous all at the same time. Can't wait for the next update.
1/24/2011 c13 Da-zGreen
Okay, I will say that instead of Ange following through the plan, she goes to Mark after getting a note from him saying that he knew exactly where she was... And if she doens't come, then he will kill Jason and his family...
I don't know, its just a thought... Lol... Its cliche, but hey, at least I helped.. Lol..
Anyways, I like what you got going on and I hope that we still have a lot of chapters to go through because I know that I will miss this story! Lol... It feels like I just barely clicked on this story and its ending now... Lol...
Anyways, hope someone gives you an inspiration to write soon.. Update soon or later, lol...
Good luck writing the next chapter!
Okay, I will say that instead of Ange following through the plan, she goes to Mark after getting a note from him saying that he knew exactly where she was... And if she doens't come, then he will kill Jason and his family...
I don't know, its just a thought... Lol... Its cliche, but hey, at least I helped.. Lol..
Anyways, I like what you got going on and I hope that we still have a lot of chapters to go through because I know that I will miss this story! Lol... It feels like I just barely clicked on this story and its ending now... Lol...
Anyways, hope someone gives you an inspiration to write soon.. Update soon or later, lol...
Good luck writing the next chapter!
1/24/2011 c13 
2Soonafter100
So u want ideas for some chapters, P.M me and tell me what you trying to shoot for and I will be more then happy to help out! Cause I want to hear and read more!
2Soonafter100So u want ideas for some chapters, P.M me and tell me what you trying to shoot for and I will be more then happy to help out! Cause I want to hear and read more!
1/17/2011 c10 reader9
i'm confused. does she know she's jason's mate in this chapter? you never blatantly say it except in the summary. it's only sort of assumed at this point that she (maybe?) knows. just wondering.
i'm confused. does she know she's jason's mate in this chapter? you never blatantly say it except in the summary. it's only sort of assumed at this point that she (maybe?) knows. just wondering.
1/17/2011 c12 Da-zGreen
Aw, they are just too freaking cute! I love them...
I didn't know that Mark had confessed his love to Ange... Can I call her that? Lol.. ANyways, yeah, I didn't know that.. Can you point in Jace's POV when he read the letter... I'm pretty sure he was mad, jealous and then, the anger surface... Lol...
Anyways, hope that you will be able to update soon! Good luck writing the next chapter!
Aw, they are just too freaking cute! I love them...
I didn't know that Mark had confessed his love to Ange... Can I call her that? Lol.. ANyways, yeah, I didn't know that.. Can you point in Jace's POV when he read the letter... I'm pretty sure he was mad, jealous and then, the anger surface... Lol...
Anyways, hope that you will be able to update soon! Good luck writing the next chapter!