
3/24/2012 c1
4yaoi8808
Dear diwu6398,
My favorite character so far is Daniel. I like him because he's so good at faking everything! Something I like about your writing is EVERYTHING!. Something I hate or dislike about your writing is this is only the first chapter! I thought the dinner scene was very amusing. I thought the sex scene was hotness in person. Overall, I give it a 300 out of a five.
Here are my other comments: You rock!
Love,
yaoi8808

Dear diwu6398,
My favorite character so far is Daniel. I like him because he's so good at faking everything! Something I like about your writing is EVERYTHING!. Something I hate or dislike about your writing is this is only the first chapter! I thought the dinner scene was very amusing. I thought the sex scene was hotness in person. Overall, I give it a 300 out of a five.
Here are my other comments: You rock!
Love,
yaoi8808
3/8/2012 c1
1Katie-apple-easy-mac
Dear diwu6398,
My favorite character so far is Michel/Mike/Mikey. I like him because He's a moody teen who i believe could follow in Mitch's footsteps (Gay). Something I like about your writing is your smut scene. Something I hate or dislike about your writing is nothing. I thought the dinner scene was hilariously awkward, you could however have amped up the awkwardness just a tad.. I thought the sex scene was Hot as. Overall, I give it a 4.5 out of a five.
Here are my other comments: please write more soon and don't forget the smut.
Love,
Katie-apple-easy-mac

Dear diwu6398,
My favorite character so far is Michel/Mike/Mikey. I like him because He's a moody teen who i believe could follow in Mitch's footsteps (Gay). Something I like about your writing is your smut scene. Something I hate or dislike about your writing is nothing. I thought the dinner scene was hilariously awkward, you could however have amped up the awkwardness just a tad.. I thought the sex scene was Hot as. Overall, I give it a 4.5 out of a five.
Here are my other comments: please write more soon and don't forget the smut.
Love,
Katie-apple-easy-mac
9/11/2011 c1
3Choseporfante
Dear diwu6398,
My favorite character so far is Daniel. I like
him because he seems to be in control of the situation...is of course the seme...among other things...
Something I like about your writing is your sentence structure and details.
Something I hate or dislike about your writing is you seem to start a lot of your sentences with pronouns, especially "he".
I thought the dinner
scene was a bit boring, maybe even unnecessary, to be honest. It didn't really add to the story.
I thought the sex scene was alright. Mitch is a masochist, huh...
Overall, I give it a
3.5 out of a five.
Here are my other comments: Am i being overly criticizing? =(
I gave more of a description than just an adjective...xD
Love, Choseporfante.

Dear diwu6398,
My favorite character so far is Daniel. I like
him because he seems to be in control of the situation...is of course the seme...among other things...
Something I like about your writing is your sentence structure and details.
Something I hate or dislike about your writing is you seem to start a lot of your sentences with pronouns, especially "he".
I thought the dinner
scene was a bit boring, maybe even unnecessary, to be honest. It didn't really add to the story.
I thought the sex scene was alright. Mitch is a masochist, huh...
Overall, I give it a
3.5 out of a five.
Here are my other comments: Am i being overly criticizing? =(
I gave more of a description than just an adjective...xD
Love, Choseporfante.
1/9/2011 c1
3no-ones-puppet
Ahaha. Love the milk bottle's predone reviews. Although she often likes to throw them out in a foreign language which is often confusing. But... Since I always do my own style review... I'll do that instead. So...
1. Loved the fact that it was funny... "If not for Mitch here..." oh the irony of that statement! Greatness! Anyways, some people claim that their story is funny but it's often not. Which is annoying. Lol. Yours wasn't.
2. Despite the carefree attitude Mitch has with Daniel, it's great to see that he's still a closet case when it comes to his family finding out... Makes it all more real.
3. Like the son Micheal. I've got a feeling he'd be the first one to find out daddy dearest's secret if it were to ever get out. :)
Great first chapter though. You are gonna write more correct?

Ahaha. Love the milk bottle's predone reviews. Although she often likes to throw them out in a foreign language which is often confusing. But... Since I always do my own style review... I'll do that instead. So...
1. Loved the fact that it was funny... "If not for Mitch here..." oh the irony of that statement! Greatness! Anyways, some people claim that their story is funny but it's often not. Which is annoying. Lol. Yours wasn't.
2. Despite the carefree attitude Mitch has with Daniel, it's great to see that he's still a closet case when it comes to his family finding out... Makes it all more real.
3. Like the son Micheal. I've got a feeling he'd be the first one to find out daddy dearest's secret if it were to ever get out. :)
Great first chapter though. You are gonna write more correct?
12/8/2010 c1
32imissyoudearly
(Oh my god! I got in!)
(NO DIRTY THOUGHTS ;])
Dear diwu6398,
Okay screw that. :P Okay I love the Mitch and Daniel(Whom of which I am calling Dani for short XD). I like it all(Minus his wife..Ew.)
I hate his wife-Because..Yeah... :P
Dinner scene= LOVE. :D
Sex? ;D Oh yeah baby!
Overall? 2100 out of 5 my love.
Here are my other comments: I lurve Trish _ And GO MIKE! YOU'RE MY HERO DUDE! :D XD
Love,
CielCaresNot
P.S: DONT CHANGE YOUR USERNAME AGAIN-I freak out when I type it in and NOTHING shows up. XD

(Oh my god! I got in!)
(NO DIRTY THOUGHTS ;])
Dear diwu6398,
Okay screw that. :P Okay I love the Mitch and Daniel(Whom of which I am calling Dani for short XD). I like it all(Minus his wife..Ew.)
I hate his wife-Because..Yeah... :P
Dinner scene= LOVE. :D
Sex? ;D Oh yeah baby!
Overall? 2100 out of 5 my love.
Here are my other comments: I lurve Trish _ And GO MIKE! YOU'RE MY HERO DUDE! :D XD
Love,
CielCaresNot
P.S: DONT CHANGE YOUR USERNAME AGAIN-I freak out when I type it in and NOTHING shows up. XD