for She Cries at Dawn12/13/2010 c1 
38Thoth Tarot
there were aspects of the poem that i liked but because you had 'the more/harder' in every line, in a poem of this length it is easy for it to become monotonous rather than enhancing the lyrical nature of the poem. so a shorter length is what i am suggesting or a break from the set structure in the middle.
38Thoth Tarotthere were aspects of the poem that i liked but because you had 'the more/harder' in every line, in a poem of this length it is easy for it to become monotonous rather than enhancing the lyrical nature of the poem. so a shorter length is what i am suggesting or a break from the set structure in the middle.
12/13/2010 c1 55Poet Lordy
Oh yes, does it for me. Why, Rythmic and Flowing, meaningful and believable. I just felt part of it. Well done. * from me. PL.
55Poet LordyOh yes, does it for me. Why, Rythmic and Flowing, meaningful and believable. I just felt part of it. Well done. * from me. PL.