for Severing Strings12/22/2010 c1 
99Dreamers-Requiem
As usual, I love the idea of this and I think you convey that really well. It's got a strong punch to it and I like the contradiction in what the two characters are saying. It flows well, but the last line struck me as a bit oddly worded, maybe change [The strings were long ago severed] to "The strings were severed long ago" ?
99Dreamers-RequiemAs usual, I love the idea of this and I think you convey that really well. It's got a strong punch to it and I like the contradiction in what the two characters are saying. It flows well, but the last line struck me as a bit oddly worded, maybe change [The strings were long ago severed] to "The strings were severed long ago" ?