for Erskine's Daughter12/24/2013 c6 Trish123
This story, like your other stories, has developed beautifully. I am very intrigued about who Erskine is and why the Colonel so desperately wants her to stay. Are you not going to update again or have you taken a long hiatus? I would love if you would update this story. :)
This story, like your other stories, has developed beautifully. I am very intrigued about who Erskine is and why the Colonel so desperately wants her to stay. Are you not going to update again or have you taken a long hiatus? I would love if you would update this story. :)
12/27/2010 c5 
2limbolical
You consistently produce engaging work and I always rejoice whenever I see a new story or chapter from you pop up in my inbox. I always become a little disappointed when I reach the end of a chapter, knowing I'll have to wait until the next update and wonder what will happen next. This is my thank you for your wonderful work and I look forward to reading the rest of this story.
2limbolicalYou consistently produce engaging work and I always rejoice whenever I see a new story or chapter from you pop up in my inbox. I always become a little disappointed when I reach the end of a chapter, knowing I'll have to wait until the next update and wonder what will happen next. This is my thank you for your wonderful work and I look forward to reading the rest of this story.
12/26/2010 c3 29YasuRan
Historical fiction is one of my favorite genres to read but I know it can be especially tricky to write. I already like the setting of this story. Very 'Wuthering Heights' at the beginning; even your writing has some classical narrative elements. The characters are quite well-defined, from the little that has been revealed about them. Yet the mystery of who Erskine really was hangs thick and I guess that might affect Ianthe's perception of who she is and where she belongs when she discovers more.
Well... if, she discovers more. She's supposed to be gone by morning, right? Unless she does end up staying on for a reason. Either way, intriguing stuff.
29YasuRanHistorical fiction is one of my favorite genres to read but I know it can be especially tricky to write. I already like the setting of this story. Very 'Wuthering Heights' at the beginning; even your writing has some classical narrative elements. The characters are quite well-defined, from the little that has been revealed about them. Yet the mystery of who Erskine really was hangs thick and I guess that might affect Ianthe's perception of who she is and where she belongs when she discovers more.
Well... if, she discovers more. She's supposed to be gone by morning, right? Unless she does end up staying on for a reason. Either way, intriguing stuff.
12/22/2010 c1 9Vivaldia
I already replied to this lady via PM, but just to clarify to other readers/reviewers:
"Endeavour" - perfectly reasonable in that context, I think.
"Deafen" - sorry, corrected - I meant "deaden".
"Celtic" - can be used as an adj. to describe something Celtic in nature.
"Coarsely" - also fine in this context, I think.
Anyone who knows Scottish Highland weather knows that a blizzard springing up in December is not an unbelivable plotline!
The other 2 points - I've gone back, re-read, and altered.
Thanks for reading everyone! I love getting your feedback. x
9VivaldiaI already replied to this lady via PM, but just to clarify to other readers/reviewers:
"Endeavour" - perfectly reasonable in that context, I think.
"Deafen" - sorry, corrected - I meant "deaden".
"Celtic" - can be used as an adj. to describe something Celtic in nature.
"Coarsely" - also fine in this context, I think.
Anyone who knows Scottish Highland weather knows that a blizzard springing up in December is not an unbelivable plotline!
The other 2 points - I've gone back, re-read, and altered.
Thanks for reading everyone! I love getting your feedback. x
12/22/2010 c1 Wendy Thompson135th
persuaded my feet to **endeavour**.
My fingers stung with cold and I shoved them back into my coat pockets to **deafen** it
'...was **coarsely** invited...'
'...his hair **Celtic**.' ~~Some of your vocabulary choices are very idiosyncratic, and not supported by any of my standard dictionaries. Endeavor is 'an attempt or a try'. Deaf now only refers to the sense of hearing. Coarse is defined as 'of low quality; lacking in delicacy'. Celtic refers to speakers of a group of languages.
"You've been a great help, Mr. McCarron. I'm Ianthe." ~~this seem totally out of character. Would a lady offer her first name? Admitting someone to first name intimacy, when he has offered only the formal address of 'Mr. McCarron, seems very forward. ~~Yes, I know it's a necessary plot point, but it's still unbelievable.
Another unbelievable plot point: '... surging blizzard which had sprung from nowhere during the short time I had been indoors..' ~~this is just too convienent to be believable.
'...assume he was extremely eager for me to leave.' ~~Is this supposed to be a humorous understatement? He says she must leave at once("...you really must leave now."), and the heroine **assumes** he wants her to go? It seems a little dense of her.
persuaded my feet to **endeavour**.
My fingers stung with cold and I shoved them back into my coat pockets to **deafen** it
'...was **coarsely** invited...'
'...his hair **Celtic**.' ~~Some of your vocabulary choices are very idiosyncratic, and not supported by any of my standard dictionaries. Endeavor is 'an attempt or a try'. Deaf now only refers to the sense of hearing. Coarse is defined as 'of low quality; lacking in delicacy'. Celtic refers to speakers of a group of languages.
"You've been a great help, Mr. McCarron. I'm Ianthe." ~~this seem totally out of character. Would a lady offer her first name? Admitting someone to first name intimacy, when he has offered only the formal address of 'Mr. McCarron, seems very forward. ~~Yes, I know it's a necessary plot point, but it's still unbelievable.
Another unbelievable plot point: '... surging blizzard which had sprung from nowhere during the short time I had been indoors..' ~~this is just too convienent to be believable.
'...assume he was extremely eager for me to leave.' ~~Is this supposed to be a humorous understatement? He says she must leave at once("...you really must leave now."), and the heroine **assumes** he wants her to go? It seems a little dense of her.
12/20/2010 c1 1SingingBird812
I loved the way you started this! The first paragraph instantly dragged me in and the rest of the chapter just continued to do so. I can't wait to read more! :)
1SingingBird812I loved the way you started this! The first paragraph instantly dragged me in and the rest of the chapter just continued to do so. I can't wait to read more! :)