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7/4/2011 c1 4Made To Syn
okkkkkkk then. that was awkward. it is too sad that neil patrick harris is gay.
6/6/2011 c1 9HeadInTheStars
This was really funny :)

Neil Patrick Harris = Awesomeness
6/6/2011 c1 4LiveLaughLoveLuck
Hilarious :)) =)) I like the George thing & the ending. So funni! :X

Oh, and I know the character on ur avatar, LaughsWithTears. I likey him. i love the manga 2 :D

Teehee :]
6/5/2011 c1 1Swahili
hehehe, nice. ur funny :)

~Swahili
3/30/2011 c1 2Phoenix sraet
Hey Suzie! Finally cracking down to do a bit of review returning (next time it takes me this long, please, PM me and tell me to get my rear in gear if you want something reviewed).

First things first: I love the way you set this up as a chat-room story. I honestly don't read many stories on here set up in this particular way-mostly because they aren't very common, and sometimes because it's difficult to get a feel for separate characters through an entirely internet-based conversation.

However, I think when a writer undertakes a short story like this, they have to pay careful attention to the rules of the game they just got themselves into. There are a couple of things I wanted to point out here for the sake of believability.

Playing around with capitalization might help your format here, because I don't know any group of people on the internet that get together in a chatroom and use consistent spelling, grammar, and capitalization. There are always internet lingo and grammatical errors involved. All of your characters have good capitalization habits and in a real chatroom, this most likely wouldn't happen (even the chatrooms full of authors I participate in aren't very concerned with capitalizing anything except personal pronouns).

It also might help with character differentiation if you spaced out their usernames, or put some in bold, some in italics, etc. just so people know who's talking, because reading each username every time to figure out who's talking can get a little bit tedious.

A few spelling errors go as follows:

"Barnes and Nobles"

-Barnes and Noble actually has no 's' on the end of "Noble", although you may have done this on purpose to give the authenticity feel for the story. If this is the case, ignore this part.

"Tolkein"

-is actually spelled "Tolkien", although the previous spelling comment may apply, and if it does please disregard this one also.

And I like how transient the conversation is in here, because it is reminiscent of an actual chatroom and constantly fluxing conversations.
2/5/2011 c1 15Ice Bubble
I... don't get the Barnes and Nobles thing...

Oh! Is it that writer's block stinks COMPARED to Barnes and Nobles?
12/27/2010 c1 2Linq
haha news to neilsmaboitoi13; neil patrick harris is acutally gay! D': lol

i liked it :)
12/25/2010 c1 WhateverFloatsUrGoat
I think that this story is awesomely funny.
12/24/2010 c1 8literal.semicolon
Rawr. You need to write more b/c this is frickin hilarious. and I WILL steal George now. XP
12/24/2010 c1 8Fira Dawnce
i don't get the barnes and nobels thing

UNTO THEE SECOND CHAPTER!

also, how the George are you sposed to make an anonomous review if it's disabled?
12/23/2010 c1 1Ganondorf The Dark Knight
george thing was funny.

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