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for Winter

12/27/2010 c1 78Insanity Streak
What a lovely description of winter. The alliteration in the second last line is nice and the poem reflects all the five senses. Whether this was intentional or not, its still a good feature of the poem.

In the second line, it sounds a bit stilted. I think: "Vibrant greens contrast against delicate whites" sounds more gramatically correct to me, but each to their own I guess. Also some punctuation would do this piece some good. I think either commas or fullstops should follow after the first and second line.

You start and finish with strong lines. :D

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