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1/27/2011 c1 Seth R. Engman
Your story is great, really exciting stuff. But I see you ahve teh same exact problem as me. Giving the action scenes life. I do the same mistake and constantly have to go back and retype several pages. Try to take up more abotu what the scenes look like, describe the main chararacters mood and feelings when he does what he does. Otherwise it's great! Especially the story! Keep it up!
1/12/2011 c1 Hive
The story is good, but it would've been better if there was more detail about where the ship was. BUt I loved it. Good vocab throughout, minor mistakes and I like it XD

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