for Merboy1/31/2016 c3 SomethingSimsy
I love this story, the narrative especially! XD I can't wait to read on!
I love this story, the narrative especially! XD I can't wait to read on!
1/8/2016 c6 
8barfuss
Love the story! I'll continue reading, just wanted to point out this little error:
Chap.5, where he tries on the new outfit, it should be "he was adorned by" rather than "adorning". Unless, of course, you mean to say that him wearing it brought out the beauty in the clothes instead of the clothes complementing his looks.
8barfussLove the story! I'll continue reading, just wanted to point out this little error:
Chap.5, where he tries on the new outfit, it should be "he was adorned by" rather than "adorning". Unless, of course, you mean to say that him wearing it brought out the beauty in the clothes instead of the clothes complementing his looks.
12/6/2015 c33 AlexRider101
This story is AMA-ZING. Its soo awesome and so fairytale like that it's unbelievable. Im surprised that it hasn't been published yet. And if it has and I did'nt know I only have 2 things to say:
1. WHY DONT I HAVE IT
2. Why is it not popular?!
This story is AMA-ZING. Its soo awesome and so fairytale like that it's unbelievable. Im surprised that it hasn't been published yet. And if it has and I did'nt know I only have 2 things to say:
1. WHY DONT I HAVE IT
2. Why is it not popular?!
11/19/2015 c30 2Drepanididae
This was a very nice sorry. The plot was engaging and the characters were fun to follow. Laney is just so boisterous and hyper at times. And Ker's inner dialogue with herself are quite funny at times, defusing even tense situations. I felt sorry for Erin, the soul in a jar twist was a surprise. It kind of leads the reader to think there is some hope for the witch, she could have just killed Erin's should and taken her body but she didn't. It makes a person think. And Tanner, 'what's this thing between my legs' it's a riot having a clueless person stomping all over taboos. It was great to see him come back in the end, a bit of do good to others and good will be done to you. I only have one thing I wish was a bit more polished up: The put down scene of the witch. I know Tanner sacrifices himself to stop the which but how do the captured souls become released, where do her powers go. It just seemed like the the focus fell largely on Tanner's demise (understandably) but the witch vanishes with little mention only to pop up randomly ashore. Overall a great piece and can't wait to see the sequel.
2DrepanididaeThis was a very nice sorry. The plot was engaging and the characters were fun to follow. Laney is just so boisterous and hyper at times. And Ker's inner dialogue with herself are quite funny at times, defusing even tense situations. I felt sorry for Erin, the soul in a jar twist was a surprise. It kind of leads the reader to think there is some hope for the witch, she could have just killed Erin's should and taken her body but she didn't. It makes a person think. And Tanner, 'what's this thing between my legs' it's a riot having a clueless person stomping all over taboos. It was great to see him come back in the end, a bit of do good to others and good will be done to you. I only have one thing I wish was a bit more polished up: The put down scene of the witch. I know Tanner sacrifices himself to stop the which but how do the captured souls become released, where do her powers go. It just seemed like the the focus fell largely on Tanner's demise (understandably) but the witch vanishes with little mention only to pop up randomly ashore. Overall a great piece and can't wait to see the sequel.
12/4/2014 c21 retrospect129
Hmm. Your main male character is reall great- very cute and likeable. However I really dislike you main Female character. She is not a likeable character at all. She is almost abusive with Tanner to be honest.
Thanks for posting you story, I enjoyed the unique aspect of it and most of your other characters but I feel like Kerri (name?) ruined it.
Hmm. Your main male character is reall great- very cute and likeable. However I really dislike you main Female character. She is not a likeable character at all. She is almost abusive with Tanner to be honest.
Thanks for posting you story, I enjoyed the unique aspect of it and most of your other characters but I feel like Kerri (name?) ruined it.
11/12/2014 c4 Ilsa with an I
If he asked me that, I would've been like, "It's for peeing. NOTHING ELSE."
If he asked me that, I would've been like, "It's for peeing. NOTHING ELSE."
8/14/2014 c18 JenWriting
Oh god she's turned into a mermaid hasn't she?! Brilliant twist if that's what it is :L
Oh god she's turned into a mermaid hasn't she?! Brilliant twist if that's what it is :L
7/23/2014 c31 thesakifan
Magical, it reminds me of the little mermaid and acquamarine. hehe
Magical, it reminds me of the little mermaid and acquamarine. hehe
3/26/2014 c32 heligirl96
I loved this story! I finished it in two days, I couldn't stop :) cant wait to read more.
I loved this story! I finished it in two days, I couldn't stop :) cant wait to read more.
3/11/2014 c32 Dr.Guest
My question (even though I'm, like, two years late) is why did Tanner not age?
I love this story soooo much! More than Tanner loved Kerrie. Yea. That much.
I bet Matt and Laney's baby will be cuter than a dolphin in a tutu.
My question (even though I'm, like, two years late) is why did Tanner not age?
I love this story soooo much! More than Tanner loved Kerrie. Yea. That much.
I bet Matt and Laney's baby will be cuter than a dolphin in a tutu.