for The Unspoken Rule5/16/2011 c11 
4MeMeLizz
Ok im like sooo happy cuz in chapter 10 they talk about the quadratic formula (x = -b +- square root of b squared + 4ac all ovr 2a) and im in 8thgrade! uv made my day! thx
4MeMeLizzOk im like sooo happy cuz in chapter 10 they talk about the quadratic formula (x = -b +- square root of b squared + 4ac all ovr 2a) and im in 8thgrade! uv made my day! thx
4/2/2011 c4 6Queen.Of.Cupcakes
"The said sibling did some things to earn giggles from his girlfriend."
Umm...what? Lol not being mean but...what? Did you mean 'He said something to earn giggles from his girlfriend' or something else?
6Queen.Of.Cupcakes"The said sibling did some things to earn giggles from his girlfriend."
Umm...what? Lol not being mean but...what? Did you mean 'He said something to earn giggles from his girlfriend' or something else?
3/6/2011 c2 1EpicGirl42
Um, hi! I have already read this story (I read it a while ago, actually) and I have also read Guide for Guides and the first chapter of Days With Desmond. I have to say, this is my favorite and literally the best story I have read on fictionpress!
-EpicGirl :)
1EpicGirl42Um, hi! I have already read this story (I read it a while ago, actually) and I have also read Guide for Guides and the first chapter of Days With Desmond. I have to say, this is my favorite and literally the best story I have read on fictionpress!
-EpicGirl :)
2/10/2011 c19 4Astarael-11
Hey!
I just read your story and thought it was really good. There were so many moments where I was like, 'Oh no!' and I could just feel the awkwardness and the intenseness (I know that's not really a word but it seemed fitting here :) )
I just think there were moments you could have slowed it down a bit like the beginning when her parents were trying to buy a faucet. That description was really good! I don't know, maybe if you rewrite it that might be something you look at.
Other than that, I thought the stroyline was really good and Jake was super-cute even though he did some things which he really shouldn't have. Plus, I thought it was quite realistic when Maria turned kind of slutty because I have known people to do that so I thought that part was really good as well.
Anyway, just thought I'd tell you I read your story and thought it was good :)
4Astarael-11Hey!
I just read your story and thought it was really good. There were so many moments where I was like, 'Oh no!' and I could just feel the awkwardness and the intenseness (I know that's not really a word but it seemed fitting here :) )
I just think there were moments you could have slowed it down a bit like the beginning when her parents were trying to buy a faucet. That description was really good! I don't know, maybe if you rewrite it that might be something you look at.
Other than that, I thought the stroyline was really good and Jake was super-cute even though he did some things which he really shouldn't have. Plus, I thought it was quite realistic when Maria turned kind of slutty because I have known people to do that so I thought that part was really good as well.
Anyway, just thought I'd tell you I read your story and thought it was good :)
2/9/2011 c1 1EpicGirl42
Love the story! Also, everyone, check out Alysoncondie .com for info on The Breathless Reads Tour!
1EpicGirl42Love the story! Also, everyone, check out Alysoncondie .com for info on The Breathless Reads Tour!
2/6/2011 c7 Zahida99
how come the girl is rachel in a chapter and maria in other?
i think rachel fits her better though, not to be racist or anything, but i really don't think of a genius when i think of maria
how come the girl is rachel in a chapter and maria in other?
i think rachel fits her better though, not to be racist or anything, but i really don't think of a genius when i think of maria
2/4/2011 c19 7E.Nelson
Even though everything was rushed and left me like: What? sometimes, it was a really good story. :)
7E.NelsonEven though everything was rushed and left me like: What? sometimes, it was a really good story. :)
2/3/2011 c6 E.Nelson
"Jake stepped out of the locker room and I descended the bleachers, trying not to trip down them."
I do believe you meant Wesley.
Everything is going in fast forward, and I feel like I'm sitting here while it all zooms past me like a speeding car. Bah. Good story, though. Definitely going to keep reading. :)
"Jake stepped out of the locker room and I descended the bleachers, trying not to trip down them."
I do believe you meant Wesley.
Everything is going in fast forward, and I feel like I'm sitting here while it all zooms past me like a speeding car. Bah. Good story, though. Definitely going to keep reading. :)
2/2/2011 c19 3notte amante
i loved how it ended it was purfect... *tear* if i could i would give you a hug
3notte amantei loved how it ended it was purfect... *tear* if i could i would give you a hug
1/30/2011 c19 3Brightheart
i loved this story. it's so sweet. i'm going to read this over and over again forever.
3Brighthearti loved this story. it's so sweet. i'm going to read this over and over again forever.
1/30/2011 c19 2Soonafter100
OMG..:'(...I love the ending!...You did a fantastic job on this story, I can't wait until you post a new chapter in The guide for Guys!
Until next time,
Soonafter100
lol!
2Soonafter100OMG..:'(...I love the ending!...You did a fantastic job on this story, I can't wait until you post a new chapter in The guide for Guys!
Until next time,
Soonafter100
lol!