2/19/2011 c1 The Imagination Addict
very interesting concept. quite well written. umm the ending is a bit... i dont know how to describe it. "soon... i'll be with you soon." is a beautiful last line. but the paragraph before about her husband doesnt seem quite right, somehow. he's almost a persona non grata, if u know what i mean. it seems to me that ur protagonist treasures her mother n sister more. so this attempt to write about her emotion regarding her husband wasn't so successful. the one good thing about the section on her husband is the line where she loves him for not seeing her like this. cos that's very in line with the character you've created for her.