for Rush1/16/2011 c1 backtodecember
This was very well described! I like the mystery in this, letting the reader draw from his or her imagination what the two people look like, what the moment looks like, etc. Nicely done.
This was very well described! I like the mystery in this, letting the reader draw from his or her imagination what the two people look like, what the moment looks like, etc. Nicely done.
1/16/2011 c1 Fiona Fiore
It's been awhile since I've read anything in 2nd person POV, but you managed to pull it off quite nicely, especially in the steamy first couple of paragraphs. The opening scene is what makes this piece shine. I'm not just saying that because all teenagers have sex on the brain (yes, even the girls). The words you choose definitely add to the sensuality. You definitely create the sense of a rush.
It's been awhile since I've read anything in 2nd person POV, but you managed to pull it off quite nicely, especially in the steamy first couple of paragraphs. The opening scene is what makes this piece shine. I'm not just saying that because all teenagers have sex on the brain (yes, even the girls). The words you choose definitely add to the sensuality. You definitely create the sense of a rush.