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7/13/2012 c1 Mem The Great
Fascinating topic. Would you please continue it.

5/12/2011 c1 Vam
Wow! This is great too! Keep this SciFi stuff up!
1/23/2011 c1 GoldRod
Very well written and detailed.

I could only recommend some formatting revisions, such as creating a separate line for a sentence. Other then that it's masterful work.
1/18/2011 c1 2Elsbeth Lagrange

Seriously, this story was a breath of fresh air! You have some really interesting ideas and they are so well presented!

I am glad we got an explanation for Captain wearing parade dress, it seemed strange at first, but you wove it into the story nicely. Too bad about the hat...

I like the image of the bridge, a cool use of space and it's quite imaginative. I was hoping Captain would have a cool floating chair in the middle of the room, but I am ok to sacrifice that image in favour of Helmsman's awesome napping place! Loved it!

I wouldn't want to end my review without some kind of constructive criticism, but there isn't too much to say here. As Captain is entering the bridge, you have a line that goes,

"...salute, many of whom..."

I would personally break this up into two sentences:

"...salute. Many of them..."

Anyway, I hope we get to see more of this great story!

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