for The Magic Mirror4/10/2011 c1 
5StarScarlet76
This is going to be good, i can tell. I'll have to read more when i have time and BTW i love the name Fier! :)
5StarScarlet76This is going to be good, i can tell. I'll have to read more when i have time and BTW i love the name Fier! :)
4/8/2011 c8 4LuxAurorae
What a nicely woven story, as I've already said before. Interactions involving Audrin always make me smile...like the part when she said she prepared her battle cry.
I guess I hadn't noticed this before, but for dialogue tags, the formatting should be:
"Are all knights like you?" she asked. (This applies for questions too
"I make a reasonable salary[,]" [he] said, as if he had read her thoughts[.] "Nothing extraordinary, but it's enough to support Bridgette and Claude.. and that's all I want."
"My brother is being modest," [s]he informed her[.] "He's in the highest circle of knights. He's quite prestigious, actually."
And etc.
I've never seen a man so crafty as Fier The Changeling[.] [If] he can't weasel himself out of this one then I don't think he deserves my respect."
There was a slow creak to it's bones as it tilted it's head and then horribly. - its for possessive. it's for "it is"
4LuxAuroraeWhat a nicely woven story, as I've already said before. Interactions involving Audrin always make me smile...like the part when she said she prepared her battle cry.
I guess I hadn't noticed this before, but for dialogue tags, the formatting should be:
"Are all knights like you?" she asked. (This applies for questions too
"I make a reasonable salary[,]" [he] said, as if he had read her thoughts[.] "Nothing extraordinary, but it's enough to support Bridgette and Claude.. and that's all I want."
"My brother is being modest," [s]he informed her[.] "He's in the highest circle of knights. He's quite prestigious, actually."
And etc.
I've never seen a man so crafty as Fier The Changeling[.] [If] he can't weasel himself out of this one then I don't think he deserves my respect."
There was a slow creak to it's bones as it tilted it's head and then horribly. - its for possessive. it's for "it is"
4/8/2011 c7 LuxAurorae
Okay, so this is what happen when I read more than one chapter at a time and review...give away spoilers! =x
But that really says something of your story. I had to keep clicking! The characters and plot are starting to come together. I love a story with good direction. Did you plan your story before writing it?
Okay, so this is what happen when I read more than one chapter at a time and review...give away spoilers! =x
But that really says something of your story. I had to keep clicking! The characters and plot are starting to come together. I love a story with good direction. Did you plan your story before writing it?
4/8/2011 c6 LuxAurorae
Great as always! Love love love your characters, even the ones that don't stay. Audrin is so hilarious!
And now I'm really interested in Niarosa too. It's so sad that he's so in love with her and she's willing to sell him out! You really make your readers feel for your characters.
Great as always! Love love love your characters, even the ones that don't stay. Audrin is so hilarious!
And now I'm really interested in Niarosa too. It's so sad that he's so in love with her and she's willing to sell him out! You really make your readers feel for your characters.
4/5/2011 c24 31HeroofEnelios
And the story gets even better with this chapter. And Sweet Revenge is an interesting name for a horse, but clever none the less and I like it. As did this chapter, I enjoyed it. Can't wait for more!
31HeroofEneliosAnd the story gets even better with this chapter. And Sweet Revenge is an interesting name for a horse, but clever none the less and I like it. As did this chapter, I enjoyed it. Can't wait for more!
4/3/2011 c23 HeroofEnelios
Eh heh, why is Graves only getting more and more evil as a person with each chapter? It keeps getting worse and he bugs me. As for the others, well at least they are alive is good. :D
A great chapter from you, can't wait for more!
Eh heh, why is Graves only getting more and more evil as a person with each chapter? It keeps getting worse and he bugs me. As for the others, well at least they are alive is good. :D
A great chapter from you, can't wait for more!
4/1/2011 c23 7zombie chickens
Marcos is patient to an eery degree. If I was training Audirn I'd be like, 'Hey, woman! Get back on your feet and try harder!' Anyway, I love Fier's constant commentary and the scene at the end was so funny!.. Mince is such an amusing character that even his death made me laugh. Write more!
7zombie chickensMarcos is patient to an eery degree. If I was training Audirn I'd be like, 'Hey, woman! Get back on your feet and try harder!' Anyway, I love Fier's constant commentary and the scene at the end was so funny!.. Mince is such an amusing character that even his death made me laugh. Write more!
3/25/2011 c21 31HeroofEnelios
Niarosa is quite the intriguing character in my eyes, very interesting and as the story progresses I cannot wait to see how she develops her personality more. :D
Awesome chapter!
31HeroofEneliosNiarosa is quite the intriguing character in my eyes, very interesting and as the story progresses I cannot wait to see how she develops her personality more. :D
Awesome chapter!
3/23/2011 c5 4LuxAurorae
Great as always. Love your characters! And there's conflict and plot momentum and everything! I almost forgot to review because I went straight to the next chapter...
One was holding a set of keys in it's[its] feathered fingers and unlocked the door.
4LuxAuroraeGreat as always. Love your characters! And there's conflict and plot momentum and everything! I almost forgot to review because I went straight to the next chapter...
One was holding a set of keys in it's[its] feathered fingers and unlocked the door.
3/21/2011 c20 31HeroofEnelios
I like these kinds of chapters, they are so refreshing and remind me of how great this story is, or any story I read for that matter. Audrin so far... at Chapter 20 is my favorite character period. :D
Great chap!
31HeroofEneliosI like these kinds of chapters, they are so refreshing and remind me of how great this story is, or any story I read for that matter. Audrin so far... at Chapter 20 is my favorite character period. :D
Great chap!
3/14/2011 c19 HeroofEnelios
I like the start of the chapter with the A/N the most, Fier is in the dungeon and I thought: Still. Still in the dungeon, and Graves is still being evil. Figures... oh well. Makes things interesting... great chapter once again!
I like the start of the chapter with the A/N the most, Fier is in the dungeon and I thought: Still. Still in the dungeon, and Graves is still being evil. Figures... oh well. Makes things interesting... great chapter once again!
3/10/2011 c18 31HeroofEnelios
And it all comes back to the ring... again. I think. Wasn't Graves after it? Cause I remember someone was. Anyways great job again on this latest installment, it was awesome.
31HeroofEneliosAnd it all comes back to the ring... again. I think. Wasn't Graves after it? Cause I remember someone was. Anyways great job again on this latest installment, it was awesome.
3/9/2011 c17 31HeroofEnelios
Interesting... this story keeps on getting more and more interesting. Nice job with this chapter, I enjoyed it through and through. Write more soon please!
31HeroofEneliosInteresting... this story keeps on getting more and more interesting. Nice job with this chapter, I enjoyed it through and through. Write more soon please!