for Farro5/18/2012 c17 Wings27
Hey, I'm really enjoying your story so far, but I wanted to point out one mistake toward the end of this chapter:
"If we're really going to do this then I'll a plant." What she should be saying is "If we're really going to do this then I'll need a plant."
Also, you've said "big words aside" twice. Unfortunately I can not recall their locations.
I love your writing style and can't wait to read more!
Hey, I'm really enjoying your story so far, but I wanted to point out one mistake toward the end of this chapter:
"If we're really going to do this then I'll a plant." What she should be saying is "If we're really going to do this then I'll need a plant."
Also, you've said "big words aside" twice. Unfortunately I can not recall their locations.
I love your writing style and can't wait to read more!
4/17/2012 c38 ColourCascade
I love this story! I don't like buying ebooks usually - I refer paperback so much more but I'll consider it for this one. I'm surprised you haven't got more reviews to me it seems like the kinda story that would be pretty famous cos it's so good. and I admire you for your writing :) its perfect! You must have edited it over and over and over.
I love this story! I don't like buying ebooks usually - I refer paperback so much more but I'll consider it for this one. I'm surprised you haven't got more reviews to me it seems like the kinda story that would be pretty famous cos it's so good. and I admire you for your writing :) its perfect! You must have edited it over and over and over.
2/7/2012 c35 RandomWritings Literaly
This is by far the best thing I have ever read on Fictionpress, and one of the best books I have ever read, if not THE best.
(Which is a lot to say considering all the books I have read.)
It made me laugh, It made me cry, and most of all... It made me want more. Never have I stayed up until three in the morning reading a book. Five stars~!
I'm going to read Sulfur right now. And if I get a Kindle, or a Nook, or whatever, I will buy it. And tell everyone I know about it.
And I'll Brag, and brag, and brag, And Brag...
*Review cut short due to use of to many characters.* ;)
This is by far the best thing I have ever read on Fictionpress, and one of the best books I have ever read, if not THE best.
(Which is a lot to say considering all the books I have read.)
It made me laugh, It made me cry, and most of all... It made me want more. Never have I stayed up until three in the morning reading a book. Five stars~!
I'm going to read Sulfur right now. And if I get a Kindle, or a Nook, or whatever, I will buy it. And tell everyone I know about it.
And I'll Brag, and brag, and brag, And Brag...
*Review cut short due to use of to many characters.* ;)
1/30/2012 c37 
1Elaina McKenzie Sharpe
Oh, he was trying to make her feel better by joking! I thought, at the time, that he was just being an insensetive jerkface! See, I love this kind of stuff because it gives me insight I wouldn't normally have. Great job!
1Elaina McKenzie SharpeOh, he was trying to make her feel better by joking! I thought, at the time, that he was just being an insensetive jerkface! See, I love this kind of stuff because it gives me insight I wouldn't normally have. Great job!
1/30/2012 c36 Elaina McKenzie Sharpe
See, he loves her. Because she doesn't have her Glamor anymore. Not at this point, only he doesn't know that. He loves her!This was an amazing chapter. I'm glad that I fianlly got to see what was going on in his head.
See, he loves her. Because she doesn't have her Glamor anymore. Not at this point, only he doesn't know that. He loves her!This was an amazing chapter. I'm glad that I fianlly got to see what was going on in his head.
1/30/2012 c35 Elaina McKenzie Sharpe
That last part was adorable, with Bomani being all insecure and freaking cute! I think they would be perfect together and he should kiss her already! He knows he loves her! But, I digress. Amazing story and I can't wait to read the sequel. I bought them both for my kindle.
That last part was adorable, with Bomani being all insecure and freaking cute! I think they would be perfect together and he should kiss her already! He knows he loves her! But, I digress. Amazing story and I can't wait to read the sequel. I bought them both for my kindle.
1/30/2012 c34 Elaina McKenzie Sharpe
Wait, wait, wait, wait, wait. He drew those pictures after he met her right? Because if he drew them before, that's a little freaky. I'd be a bit freaked out by the drawings anyway, but I think the pictures are changing as he realizes that Khensa isn't as horrible as he originally thought.
Jarai is so cute. I imagine him being such an adorable little kid that you just want to hug!
Wait, wait, wait, wait, wait. He drew those pictures after he met her right? Because if he drew them before, that's a little freaky. I'd be a bit freaked out by the drawings anyway, but I think the pictures are changing as he realizes that Khensa isn't as horrible as he originally thought.
Jarai is so cute. I imagine him being such an adorable little kid that you just want to hug!
1/30/2012 c33 Elaina McKenzie Sharpe
Okay, still love Bomani but hes a little crazy. He smiled! Oh, I grinned a little there. And, -gasps- Mbiki is her FATHER! Wow. Didn't see that one coming. Wonderful chapter!
Okay, still love Bomani but hes a little crazy. He smiled! Oh, I grinned a little there. And, -gasps- Mbiki is her FATHER! Wow. Didn't see that one coming. Wonderful chapter!
1/30/2012 c32 Elaina McKenzie Sharpe
OH MY GOODNESS! Such action and description. You are a really beautiful writer! You have such a way with words and I absolutely love how original this plot is! And I love the names you use, Bomani, Khensa, Lateef, Onion, Mbiki! Wonderful!
I really feel for these characters and I love watching them develop!
OH MY GOODNESS! Such action and description. You are a really beautiful writer! You have such a way with words and I absolutely love how original this plot is! And I love the names you use, Bomani, Khensa, Lateef, Onion, Mbiki! Wonderful!
I really feel for these characters and I love watching them develop!
1/23/2012 c31 Elaina McKenzie Sharpe
Bomani loves her, he really loves her. Lol. It's so obvious to me.
Bomani loves her, he really loves her. Lol. It's so obvious to me.
1/23/2012 c26 Elaina McKenzie Sharpe
Oh, okay. Bomani could have warned her that his mother is completely nuts.
Oh, okay. Bomani could have warned her that his mother is completely nuts.