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2/6/2011 c1 Punslinger
This is enjoyable to read as a poem. But it's hard to judge it as a song without hearing the music. I like your rhymes, especially "My mistakes always become clearer/Every time I look in the mirror." That conveys a lot of meaning with few words.
2/6/2011 c1 18Open your eyes Chopstick
i liked the last two lines of the poem. it brings everyrthing sorta crashing down. very simple. nicely done. :)

The only think i thought was weird was the *?* in the poem. Why did you use the stars? Interesting, but left me go out of the flow of the poem you were working up.

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