for The Boy Who Eats Hearts2/18/2011 c5 
5I Can Breathe
I read this in the morning and I really liked the justification you used. It seems to make Micah a bit more human, if that makes sense - up to this point his intentions were intangible and I liked that we don't know why he chose to help Georgiana.
5I Can BreatheI read this in the morning and I really liked the justification you used. It seems to make Micah a bit more human, if that makes sense - up to this point his intentions were intangible and I liked that we don't know why he chose to help Georgiana.
2/15/2011 c4 5I Can Breathe
I'm sorry about the name confusion - it's a bad and acquired habit that I have due to the character's in my seminar class readings - I tend to associate names that are closely related and stick with the one that's most comfortable. Sorry! But thanks for pointing that out - it was a good way to catch my attention.
This chapter is by far my favorite. I love the tone - it's blunt and to the point and just a bit sarcastic - I see it as a mockery of a documentary which is a pretty unique way of setting Georgiana's "pathetic" life without falling into cliches and making it overly dramatic.
Also, I like the way you give us information about her background and offer it as some sort of explanation without actually going out and victimizing her.
The title casually being there is so perfect. I usually instinctively roll my eyes when it's done because I feel like it's too corny and avoid writing titles in my own writing but this didn't feel forced. I feel like author's spend too much time contemplating where the title should go but in your story it felt like you wrote beforehand and went in and said this is the title. The phrase: "And Micah Knight was known as the boy who eats hearts" just seemed natural and flowed into the story and it didn't make you pause and think.
I'm just waiting for the Taylor and Georgiana talk to happen.
5I Can BreatheI'm sorry about the name confusion - it's a bad and acquired habit that I have due to the character's in my seminar class readings - I tend to associate names that are closely related and stick with the one that's most comfortable. Sorry! But thanks for pointing that out - it was a good way to catch my attention.
This chapter is by far my favorite. I love the tone - it's blunt and to the point and just a bit sarcastic - I see it as a mockery of a documentary which is a pretty unique way of setting Georgiana's "pathetic" life without falling into cliches and making it overly dramatic.
Also, I like the way you give us information about her background and offer it as some sort of explanation without actually going out and victimizing her.
The title casually being there is so perfect. I usually instinctively roll my eyes when it's done because I feel like it's too corny and avoid writing titles in my own writing but this didn't feel forced. I feel like author's spend too much time contemplating where the title should go but in your story it felt like you wrote beforehand and went in and said this is the title. The phrase: "And Micah Knight was known as the boy who eats hearts" just seemed natural and flowed into the story and it didn't make you pause and think.
I'm just waiting for the Taylor and Georgiana talk to happen.
2/15/2011 c4 midnights.blues.s
Well, I missed reviewing the last 2 chapters but at the speed you uploading,it's no surprise.You'll have to bear with me but not to worry I'll get to it.
My you're so damn good at screwing with Little G's life,I'm still all for strangling her sister.And Micah...he's got his hands full with such a task as her.Tyler, on the other hand, is amazing and her reaction at the end was so fitting.
Overall it was an enjoyable read and I'll surely stay tuned in for more.I can't wait for the next installment and by the look of things,you won't make us wait for long.
Well, I missed reviewing the last 2 chapters but at the speed you uploading,it's no surprise.You'll have to bear with me but not to worry I'll get to it.
My you're so damn good at screwing with Little G's life,I'm still all for strangling her sister.And Micah...he's got his hands full with such a task as her.Tyler, on the other hand, is amazing and her reaction at the end was so fitting.
Overall it was an enjoyable read and I'll surely stay tuned in for more.I can't wait for the next installment and by the look of things,you won't make us wait for long.
2/15/2011 c4 Soonafter100
Okay, PLEASE, plz, please update soon!
Okay, PLEASE, plz, please update soon!
2/15/2011 c4 PJ Draft
I was hoping for more dialogue between the characters, but over all, I love. Also, the mean girl Alyssa character sounds interesting so far. Do hope you expand on the other characters as well. Anyways, I thank you for the update! I hope plenty of reviews fly your way.
I was hoping for more dialogue between the characters, but over all, I love. Also, the mean girl Alyssa character sounds interesting so far. Do hope you expand on the other characters as well. Anyways, I thank you for the update! I hope plenty of reviews fly your way.
2/13/2011 c3 PJ Draft
My opinion? Be your own beta. Quicker updates might be more my style. Just make sure you go back and fix prior chapters if the readers notice any issues. Or pm me, if I'm online then ill be glad to take a quick read before you post. I know it is extremely difficult to edit your own writing because one easily skips over mistakes without fail. Anyways, storywise I love. When I have the time I will check out talking to the moon. I am on my cell so its a pain for my eyes to read much more. X.x When I get to a computer ill take a read. ;)
My opinion? Be your own beta. Quicker updates might be more my style. Just make sure you go back and fix prior chapters if the readers notice any issues. Or pm me, if I'm online then ill be glad to take a quick read before you post. I know it is extremely difficult to edit your own writing because one easily skips over mistakes without fail. Anyways, storywise I love. When I have the time I will check out talking to the moon. I am on my cell so its a pain for my eyes to read much more. X.x When I get to a computer ill take a read. ;)
2/13/2011 c1 cookiewolf
Really liking it so far=) lol at micah and georgina's interaction. Hope you update soon.
Really liking it so far=) lol at micah and georgina's interaction. Hope you update soon.
2/13/2011 c3 5I Can Breathe
I kind of liked seeing Micah interacting other people - it makes him seem more humane. I think Taylor will be a very important character, perhaps she should change her mind and help Georgina - it would be interesting since both characters seem to have similar backgrounds. I think unedited chapters are good as long as you read them over once and fix the minor problems.
5I Can BreatheI kind of liked seeing Micah interacting other people - it makes him seem more humane. I think Taylor will be a very important character, perhaps she should change her mind and help Georgina - it would be interesting since both characters seem to have similar backgrounds. I think unedited chapters are good as long as you read them over once and fix the minor problems.
2/13/2011 c3 5Disney Is Hardcore
Tbh he didn't seem like that much of an ass to me. Just clueless, I guess. Pretty stupid but Idk.
Depending on how badly your chapters need editing I'd say just go unedited. Unless you make a LOT of mistakes which could get annoying.
5Disney Is HardcoreTbh he didn't seem like that much of an ass to me. Just clueless, I guess. Pretty stupid but Idk.
Depending on how badly your chapters need editing I'd say just go unedited. Unless you make a LOT of mistakes which could get annoying.
2/13/2011 c1 Disney Is Hardcore
I really like the was you described her hair... Made me laugh :)
And your contrast was very effective also.
I really like the was you described her hair... Made me laugh :)
And your contrast was very effective also.
2/11/2011 c2 PJ Draft
Awesome chapter! The line about Georgiana being one of those "I am a virgin, just look at me" types was priceless! Anyways, comments on writing: I am in love with the way you tell the story. Witty, with characterizations that are well done. :) I am so excited for the next installment. You also have a nack for adding personality, and habits (Mitch scratching his sexy neck, etc.) I feel like I KNOW the characters, and that is a great thing. :) Anways, update please! -PJ
Awesome chapter! The line about Georgiana being one of those "I am a virgin, just look at me" types was priceless! Anyways, comments on writing: I am in love with the way you tell the story. Witty, with characterizations that are well done. :) I am so excited for the next installment. You also have a nack for adding personality, and habits (Mitch scratching his sexy neck, etc.) I feel like I KNOW the characters, and that is a great thing. :) Anways, update please! -PJ