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3/3/2011 c1 5thefaultinourpatronus
I think you've got the dialogue down, definitely. It flows really well and is pretty realistic throughout. You've established a ground for the characters and the little cliffhanger at the end adds to this! Great work (:

x mandy
2/18/2011 c3 1Bryanna
Wonderful! I can't wait to find out why these women can see/hear/sense the supernatural.

Oh, and I caught this: "the baroque" - I'm assuming you meant to type "barbeque" and not refer to the Baroque time period ;).

- B.
2/15/2011 c2 Bryanna
I really want to know what happened to Tara!

Great suspense :)

- B.
2/14/2011 c1 Bryanna
This is a really great start! I noticed some minor spelling mistakes, and also this: "...long swig of her cigarette". The word 'swig' is associated with drinking something. A 'long pull of her cigarette' or something similar would sound much better.

Other than that, keep it up!

- B.

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