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3/4/2011 c1 lymli
that's sad n ‚ô•felt, I like the last lines.
3/3/2011 c1 16non.graceful
Now this is a poem i can connect to! Great... reminds me of when my mother was in hospital in my younger years.

But apart from that I also like the way you've used the noises and stuff in your poem- whats that called again?- and there's quite a bit of tension.

Although it's good i reckon it just needed a bit more.
3/3/2011 c1 1Hoor-al-Ayn
Cool.

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